Storm2023

It’s like that off and on a fair bit

Red hot habenaro not bloody

Okay this story has potential but just isn’t living up to it so far. You are rushing thing but aren’t explaining anything at all, skipping a ton of character development, missing the charm that comes from the smallville show, skipping over almost all character interaction, you gloss over important information like the fact the mc is an alien but you never specify what kind, if he has powers, you don’t really explain well on what kind of character lex is in this because it’s all jumbled, you just rush past literally everything in such short chapter that it makes this whole story a mess and nothing is coherent and cohesive, some things like Clark meeting lex and you saying it happed years ago but in all actuality it happened months ago at most makes no sense. Like I just don’t get what you’re trying to do in and with this story because everything is all over the place with zero structure and is being sped through without any real thought to characters and development, background info, actual character emotions and interactions that show his time In smallville, like the villians he fights, people he saves, and all the stuff that made the show lovable just isn’t here and feels lifeless.

Years? If they are still in high school and Clark is pining over Lana then this makes no sense

Honestly that doesn’t seem like a name either of the Kent’s would come up with, their more traditional in naming

Okay wtf is going on? The only tag to this story is supernatural so i was under the impression it was in that show, then I start reading and it’s about some kids chased by machine people or something and now gettign experimented on. Like this is so random and confusing that it’s wild

Where’s the ice, there was only fire

Exactly

Am I the only one getting whiplash from reading this story and how things are all going back and forth like bipolar disorder? One second some of team Elena has a major crush on some originals and flirting and even boning them, and the next the are cold and hateful to them and so on and so forth? It’s kinda annoying, same with the fact lol did that whole ass speech about destroying his mom and the ghosts of they mess with him and now he is constantly allowing them to do it over and over, it makes parts of the story redundant and annoying so I just don’t get what you’re going for here.

Violin? He said guitar, piano, and a bit of drums