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I tried other openings that go straight to the action but the reading experience felt better with this as I think Ch1 set the scene enough for now.

Hi, thank you for giving your power stones to my WN. I hope you continue to enjoy reading it.

Hi thank you for giving your power stones to my Webnovel. I hope you enjoy reading. :)

This is a pretty good novel, I enjoyed reading the first several chapters. The author is pretty good with grammar, and pacing is good too and the actual plot and character interactions was nice to read and felt engaging. However, the poor wording really ruined the flow of reading. And the lack of updating will definitely be a dealbreaker to potential avid readers. Everything can be improved, nice start author.

Since nobody else will be real with you, I'll be the one to say it. This webnovel is trash. First paragraph in, and the author is already bumbling nonsense akin to "every 60 seconds a minute passes in Africa." Word choice, grammar and flow are terrible. There are far too many mistakes to point out. Instead of wasting your time continuing to write this, go spend your time reading quality isekai webnovels to see how your novel should be written. And at least use an AI editor this time.

Mediocre at best. A low grade story if we are being real. Poor wording, grammar and flow. Too early to judge the plot but from the first chapter I already don't want to read anymore.

This is a very unique story, very unique prose and storyline, but not in a bad way. For the most part, everything flows well, wording and grammar is good. Character interactions, dialogue and development is well written and feel good to read. But it feels like this story lacks the traditional order of ops, and the buildup climax resolution refresh that people usually read novels for, maybe because the author is dragging it out? Or maybe it is hard to recognise because of the uniqueness of this prose? I don't know why, but if you agree, perhaps this is an area of improvement, author. But other than that, I have no complaints. Nice story, author!

20 USD are you surem, author? Lol

This whole paragraph is confusing and can be much better if rewritten

This feels like a cutesy wish fulfilment romance from the author, lol. The grammar is mostly correct, the author obviously has a decent understanding of it all, for the most part everything flows smoothly, especially the dialogue which is well done, however there are many minor mistakes. I can confidently say these are mistakes and not just errors due to lack of understanding because the rest of the work differs greatly. Proofreading your work multiple times at different times will help eliminate these mistakes. However, the last update was over a month ago, you'll need to update more regularly if you are serious about it and want to make something of this novel.