Dakota_Morrison

That shirt was just perfect. I almost died laughing.

That is so rushed it's not even enjoyable to read.

He dropped his sword? Isn't that one of his tools? He kinda needs that, it's stupid to leave it behind, especially if they can find a way to track him down using it as a catalyst of some kind. Is he blatantly trying to give them a lead to identify them?

If she joins then everyone who plots against the mc is screwed.

Are you forgetting that just about anything not made of ghoul cells is not going to work on damaging ghouls? Tinker tech I can understand, vibro blades I can understand, but regular blades no matter how well made are not going to damage her at all. And to make it worse is if you are giving her armor on the level of the one eyed owl. In that instance even most kagune made weapons below a certain level will be ineffective.

I would have left it at having fun in whatever chaos you decide to cause. Because honestly doing something as simple as talking crap online could being chaos if taken far enough. Like for instance if you like talking smack and seeing people rage in response, then you could easily find it fun and possible to hack into a database and leave a taunting message after taking some money in small amounts, or literally taking nothing but still leaving the message. Hell if you are skilled and connected enough, you could elevate it to targeting government facilities in this world where being a genius is more common. Especially if it's backed by tinker or thinker powers.

Seriously? Directly ripping off the scene from kaneki and Jason from Tokyo ghoul? Even the counting down from a thousand by seven? Kinda disappointed it wasn't more unique and specialized to her character. You even copied the knuckle cracking.

What the fuck? Are you creating a low budget discount joker mc? Mixed with the powers of a ghoul from Tokyo ghoul? Seriously? You better pull this off right because that seems like the most interesting thing I've read in a long time. And If you screw this up then this story will turn into one of the biggest disappointments I've ever read.

"fuck slash", the fuck kind of name is that? If you're going to name a move have the common decency to give a proper decent name. Not this bull crap of an excuse. Hell "fuck you slash" would have been better.

The hell is this? One moment he's intelligent and self aware, the next he's an impulsive oblivious idiot. Are you trying to mix two different character types to give him depth or something? Cause if so, it's not working.