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This is my first work, so I don't expect it to be perfect or considered a gem. If you have any suggestions, you can comment it, and I will make sure to keep them in mind. Maybe edit the story a bit or implement something knew if I think it's a good idea. Thanks for the feedback.
Author here, this is my first time trying to write something. Please don't hesitate to say anything that doesn't make sense/is wrong. English is my second language but I am confident that there isn't too many grammatical mistakes. This story is mostly inspired by my own life (obv with a little fantasy). So, ENJOY!
If you're into watching a slut that just fucks anyone and everyone, this is the novel for you, just pure degenerate content. You might as well watch porn instead of this.
So far the concept is very well done, the story feels original and well thought out. I have nothing bad to say about it, if you're looking for a good read this is it.
There isn't enough time or words to see how the MC is feeling, it's all just too fast-paced. I would recommend to slow down a bit and focus on details.
So far the story is really enjoyable, but I feel like at the beginning it was too fast-paced. Everything felt a little rushed. But other than that it's a good read.
yo ur teath good?
I really like this story, I feel really immersed and the grammar, world building, and characters are all good and I can't really find anything to criticise about.
y no update :( ........................................................................................................
ok it's fine :( gl in the contest tho 👍