FlyingDutchgirl

whyyyyyyyy

pace is a bit slow (good slow burn), chapters are a bit too long (like why don't you just split em lol) story is great, near-professional quality world is interesting, wish it's a bit more eastern than western but alright ANYWAY KEEP ON WRITING

feel like i've actually just been introduced to the real story in this chapter

storyline looks very intriguing but execution is a fail writing style and quality can still improve, world background is fine GO ON! KEEP ON WRITING

"They looked like NPCs from an online cultivation game." ??????

??? seem to find this line almost everywhere these days hilarious hahaha