What do you mean torture? I'm assuming this a compliment that I write well? :D

Intersting setup and the magic battles are pretty detailed. The flow of scene is uninterrupted as writing quality is good. Keep up the good work

How will he both save her and kill her?

The story progression builds on classic 'Divine powers' system. And the setting of the main character is done pretty soon into the chapters. There are a few grammatical errors which break immersion of reading a bit, but other than that it is a promising story.

She looked at them not he. You should go through and correct grammatical errors like this

Isn't it Haley causing trouble for Harley? You wrote it in reverse

Hi Ava, I am already on Goodnovel. Please check

Thank you so much. Keep reading !!

Really well written story and a unique world building. Its like a futuristic cyberpunk but with mysterious powers in the blend. That said, the scenes of carnage are just described using a few words. It can be expanded upon to make people feel the impact. And the paragraphing should be done properly..shorter paragraphs would be easier to read and floow. Keep up the great work

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Make sure there is proper paragraphing. The flow of eye is blocked whe there are really big paragraphs

you have already messaged me and i have taken a contract from gn as well

Hii, So happy to hear such positive feedback. It cheered me up. I'm so glad that you liked it. Please keep reading on. What was the question you had??

got it

Jesusssss.

Thats the idea. I always imagine Mc chilling on a hil as mobs rush towards him to get killed by his Zither music

Hi, I have updated all the chapters with approporiate paragraphing. :)

I have updated teh chapters to make them more readable. :)

Will update the paragraphing. Thanks for the feedback

This has been the 2nd time people have said this. I guess it's really true. I will edit the chapters and make the paragraphing a little better. But doesn't it make it look bigger? Meh,, I'll do it anyway. Thanks for the feedback