Alfiemooon

great chapter, was super fun to read.

I can tell I'm not going to enjoy this. the writing is just poor. From the talking out loud as a way of conveying thoughts to the reader, to the blank personality, the lack of knowledge of asoiaf, the way your characters talk like old grandmothers from 1940's england rather than characters from planetos. it's just shit

how does she even fit

this suffers from what most of corns fics suffer from, characters just always feel weak. He could write a character with power equivalent to the sage of 6 paths and they'd still just feel weak. character are hyped up too early, or we see their progression too closely, which makes them seem stronger than they are. character progression doesn't have to be, and honestly shouldn't be, they get strong -> they still lose -> get stronger -> beat the person they lost to -> repeat process till the end of the fic. That's just so amateurish, like I expect that from kids who first start out writing, not somebody who's done this for years. you're fairy tail/bleach crossover suffered from this too. no matter how strong the MC was, they were constantly losing to everyone except fodder. it's just annoying to read something that has so much potential fail in things that are so easy to resolve.

why would she give up that information...

when he goes all out, does he not ditch them🤦‍♂️

feels kinda cheap that some no Name dude could destroy his bones. hoping he gets the kaguya bone disintegration thing. definitely seems like it's the weaker of his kekkei genkai if an all it took was an explosion.

source for this?

he could shatter her kunai without lobbing off a chunk of her arm. his aim can't be that shit if he's considered a prodigy.

since when? that's literally never been a problem in canon? Don't give problems to things that don't need them. that's just plain unnecessary. it the jutsu is slow, that's on anko. Obito Uchiha was able to use it amazingly well against Kakashi. most people we've seen in canon have used it without it's speed being an issue, Itachi and Sasuke among them.