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ARnab3 years ago
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Romance in Paris, what's better then that classic setting? The plotline and the FMC are really complementing to each other. One magnifies the other's beauty. A simple drunken bet being the driving force of the story and the various incidents in the daily life of the characters being so relatable really stirs a perfect combo of a little fantasy in real life. Besides the author's writing style of telling the story to the readers from a third person pov is the best way I like reading a romance novel.❤️❤️❤️
The bet
perkotaan · Jo_J
ARnab3 years ago
Balas ARnab
Is it showing?
THE 7TEEN: LET THE PAIN EXIST
Seram · Adwaid_Nambiar
ARnab3 years ago
Diterbitkan
The story is quite good but it has a lot of errors with punctuations and grammatical factors. I think you should review the draft after you complete writing before you publish the chapters cause those mistakes take a lot out of the story and destroys its flow. I also think you should put a little more work in the dialogues and some of them are really out of order. I hope you don't take it the wrong way. Keep up writing.
The Tale Of Vampires And Werewolves
Seram · AnthonyGalloway
ARnab3 years ago
Berkomentar
A better use of punctuations will make readers more attached
Ch 1 A Family Of Vampires
The Tale Of Vampires And Werewolves
Seram · AnthonyGalloway
ARnab3 years ago
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the " s in this para are out of the mark
"Yes, ma'am you called me to the study?" She said in a respectful manner awaiting our mother's response. "Oh, baby you look so beautiful today... Now I called you to tell you to go get your bag ready for your lessons today." "Yes, ma'am I will immediately," Miah said in a sweet tone then rushing down the hall to her room." I look at mother and I sigh then say, "Mother when is father coming back I am starving to death?" She there and then replied, "Who knows James calm down and focus on your sentence, and he will return soon I hope."
The Tale Of Vampires And Werewolves
Seram · AnthonyGalloway
ARnab3 years ago
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and a long blue dress ( wearing instead of and would be better IMO )
"Miah! Come upstairs to the study immediately!" My mother shouted throughout the Duskman mansion. My sister used her vampire speed to get here, rushed in, and ran into one of the bookshelves in the giant study room. My sister Miah is about four feet three with loud poofy brown hair with a light brown skin tone and a long blue dress along with white legging under it all and fancy heels on her feet.
The Tale Of Vampires And Werewolves
Seram · AnthonyGalloway
ARnab3 years ago
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And my entire family... ( it's quite odd and a little bit out of the line )
To be completely honest I hated that we had to hide our true selves from the public but that's the life of a teenage vampire. My family has only moved once like 2 decades ago and it was horrible. And my entire family are vampires this has been so for centuries so I believe. I have 4 siblings and two of them are younger and the other two are older than me.
The Tale Of Vampires And Werewolves
Seram · AnthonyGalloway
ARnab3 years ago
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honest,I
To be completely honest I hated that we had to hide our true selves from the public but that's the life of a teenage vampire. My family has only moved once like 2 decades ago and it was horrible. And my entire family are vampires this has been so for centuries so I believe. I have 4 siblings and two of them are younger and the other two are older than me.
The Tale Of Vampires And Werewolves
Seram · AnthonyGalloway
ARnab3 years ago
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Bostic, North Carolina
"My name is James Duskman I am 16 and I am from Bostic North Carolina and I just moved here not too long ago." I recited aloud, "Excellent James you need to remember this for when we have to move... Just in case someone finds out about our family's secret." My mother said to me with her hands hugging each other while smiling at me.
The Tale Of Vampires And Werewolves
Seram · AnthonyGalloway
ARnab3 years ago
Berkomentar
Duskman,I
"My name is James Duskman I am 16 and I am from Bostic North Carolina and I just moved here not too long ago." I recited aloud, "Excellent James you need to remember this for when we have to move... Just in case someone finds out about our family's secret." My mother said to me with her hands hugging each other while smiling at me.
The Tale Of Vampires And Werewolves
Seram · AnthonyGalloway