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  • DaoistJ2BfOl
    DaoistJ2BfOl6 days ago
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    It's very good, I hope you keep writing it. I like the pace, and so far the updates are stable. I think the best advice is to keep writing. If you give up... you never improve. As for squads, I could give it defensive midfield skills. A player with defense is very important, even if he doesn't seem to stand out. Or the June Fernanducano squad. They say he's the best free-kick taker.

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    DaoistJ2BfOl6 days ago
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    Good. Just keep going. [img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=Mad][img=angry][img=angry][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]

  • DaoistJ2BfOl
    DaoistJ2BfOl13 days ago
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    Lui huatang in fifa games score 2000 goals

  • DaoistJ2BfOl
    DaoistJ2BfOl14 days ago
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    We love jenna

  • DaoistJ2BfOl
    DaoistJ2BfOl14 days ago
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    When he published it, he passed it off as his own. Now he's changing it. It's not my fault that people appropriate what isn't theirs and don't even give proper recognition. The thing is, even though it's a translation, it's terrible. I read the entire series in MTL, but oh well...

  • DaoistJ2BfOl
    DaoistJ2BfOla month ago
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    The truth is losing the plot, if you want an imperfect character, there have to be consequences... that is, punitive punishment for being imperfect or acting like an idiot... that is, if you spend your entire life drunk and drinking, don't expect him to be a top quality athlete... also, the problem is that it doesn't go with the rhythm of haikyuu. Third is that you include things that don't go with the plot...it's excessive. but again they are advice, which you must understand for the plot that a book must follow a line so that it is logical... it is the understanding of the plot by the readers

  • DaoistJ2BfOl
    DaoistJ2BfOl2 months ago
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    Does a practice match last five chapters? try to do it in one.

  • DaoistJ2BfOl
    DaoistJ2BfOl2 months ago
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    It focuses on many things except volleyball, most of the chapters go the other way, we do not see the expected development of the characters and how they act...the characters accept the protagonist, just like that, his way of being is somewhat scratchy and does not end up fulfilling what the author promised...I mean it gives clues that it is very good, but it does not give many explanations...it seems busy in the development and contains a bit of comedy that can be tiresome because it is tainted in large quantities by irony. It's a good story, it just needs polishing some parts