Vipex_Puka

Nice Name. PS. it's also my name

I really like the story so far, but you could Break the big paragraphs into more smaller ones, like maybe 5 or 6 lines, maybe a bit longer if it fehlst better to read, makes it smoother to read.

I really like what youve done with this world

Its a shame that you re-write, but at the sme time Im excited

really nice ............................

A Chaos Demon from Warhammer

I've seen a few mistakes here and there, but overall, this is my favourite work here on this site.Keep going!

He chose right with a kid like you

Bro, that's just disrespectfull.Why does your Dad not look for another woman, that's not as ugly and old as your mother huh?