I've never realized my fond in writing books, I'm happy to all the time. I'm trying to reach my goal of becoming a great Author and I hope it works. :)
I mean, I like the story but it doesn't really have a plot, everything is all over the place meaning that lots of stuff in the poem are unnecessary to the plot. It doesn't even have a synopsis. I don't wanna be too hard on you since you are a beginner it's just constructive criticism.