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Alright, let's see where it leads then It's got loads of potential
Alright, let's see where it leads then It's got loads of potential
I know, I just thought we could see something different, have his father involved, agents aren't family, not all has your best interest in heart. Of course Mendes is said to be a good guy, his father getting involved would have been good thou
I have to no problem with the first heartbreak , even thou its a teenage nonsense, but one heartbreak is fine mate . The way you're writing it's gonna be another failed relationship, because you can feel pain doesn't mean you deserve it. They're better ways to gain life experiences than what you've got planned. Because hardship is part of life doesn't and we've all experienced it doesn't mean everyone should. Let's get a focused family and career MC , his tempered enough, no one will find a novel interesting with heartbreaks as life experiences. I read the latest chapter, there's a part about Mendes insisting on him attending the party even thou he doesn't want to, I mean, I was expecting him to be firmer in his decision, fuck Mendes, the connections all those, at that time he needed to reflect on the team loss, relax and heal. Just my opinion thou, I might just be speaking from frustration But you're doing a great job
Nice job mate, ur doing great
Looks promising, I'm looking forward to more
What sort of fucking experience is that, this could ruin the whole story. He's gone thru enough struggle and hardship, what more experience do you want him to have , he just breaks up with a girl you claim he loves, he's 17, you should be making him reflect on it, not jump directly into another toxic relationship or so And pls explore his family time life too, not just football matches, spending time with his parents. And does he even take a break? , he's playing every single game, every minute. He could have fun outside football that doesn't include your constant toxic relationship propaganda disguised as experience, no offence Let's see him train, how he does it, what he does , explore his home, other hobbies, he could get a chef, fitness trainer, explore ideas of life, business ans investment outside football or even within. Maybe his parents give him siblings too. My opinion
He's dad could be his agent Keep it in the family maybe,tired of seeing super agents and stuffs, let's see something different
oh thanks