King_Noran

Shameless review by your boy King Noran here. So, this is a story I've been wanting to work on for a while now. I really like supernatural and fantasy stuff (the tragedy and dark fantasy part is nothing, I just find them more interesting and... realistic? Whatever). I will not abandon my other novel [Adam: The Vagabond]. I'll just repeat it here, I will be splitting time.

The words are poetic and lovely as a Shakespeare original. There's this hint of longing as you read the characters and the events, plus the subtle but important details make the story beautiful and seamless. Would recommend, definitely worth a try.

thanks for reading my stuff mate. my stomach's not doing well so forgive me for not updating a chapter

Okay, first the good points. Images are vivid because of the clear and detailed narrative. The story is somewhat interesting, and author is playful with words. However, the bad points lie in the synopsis. The author was 'lazy', which is not a word you want to use since it's an X for most, a turn off. There's also stuff like the narrative breaking the fourth wall on the first chapter, not a fan. Well, you might think that its a bad novel, its not. Its good actually, and the points I pointed out are rather minor. Good work author!

It's a fun to read book with a lot of good humor. There's... unique, elements at play like a god, well, just read it i cant explain hahaha. Its a good book.

fixed, brother.

{This bracket} for onomatopoeia is now minimalized and in the later chapters, completely vanished. tnx for the insight!

trying to fix it now. tnx!

the [brackets like this] actually is conversation with the nymph, and (brackets like this are Adam's reply to them.) I have decided to use 'Parenthesis' for the other's thoughts or simply narrate theirs but yeah I'm keeping them because it will get even more confusing without them (for me, I think).

yeah, it was supposed to be "what a weird lady." fixed it. thanks for the insight