Cloki

Author here, leave feedback! I take kindly to constructive criticism and story ideas/other miscellaneous feedback! I hope you are enjoying the story thus far.

Pretty good so far! Read the prologue and up through chapter 6, will read more when I have time. I love the dark aspects of it, things such as the voids, darkness and chaos, and space and time all mingling together, with their own jobs in the universe. The encounters between Genesis and Heaven, clashing back and forth, trying to realize a correct way of going about the re-creation of everything, and then whom I assume is the MC, coming about in the Astral Realm! Though, he seems to be experiencing every pain imaginable from the moment he wakes up there haha. I love it so far, and recommend it! The more you read, the more enticed you get! Good job!

Yo this just got real, super quick.

Ahhh, I see now. Nevermind then!

Ah, his appearance did change.

Truly words to consider. I wonder how things are gonna go for Genesis now.

Chaos in the Void, though it might not be the "Chaos" as described earlier. It's still fascinating to picture so much going on at once.

If this prologue is meant to be an origin story for everything, you're doing a very good job. Heaven and Genisis both seem like level-headed individuals, yet their ideas clash. I like it so far if I'm understanding it right.

Read the first chapter. These are some long chaps you have! Are they 5k+ words? I'm used to shorter chaps, so I only read the first, and a little bit into 2. But, I like where it's going. I've never really explored the concept of Yuri, although I am a fan of romance, and the characters seem quite intriguing in terms of their potential in the future. Well done so far!