Silent_Dude

I thought everyone knew this...

From what the hero has shown so far, it's complete bullshit. I don't notice any experience behind his actions and thoughts. Maybe just the experience of a naive schoolboy.

The author doesn't follow what he wrote before at all. There are so many inconsistencies with what was in the first chapters that it's just not funny anymore.

There will be some spoilers. So, I have read only 17 chapters. The author clearly did not think the story through thoroughly, and does not write down important fanfic data for better memorization and following the story. The author is either very young and inexperienced, or considers readers to be idiots, because most of the explanations or situations are too stupid and immature. The main character behaves like a typical Japanese in anime, although, in fact, he is not one. Stuttering, afraid of social interactions, shy around girls ON A CONSTANT BASIS (I speak from experience, you get used to open and beautiful girls very quickly.). Moreover, the character is incredibly stupid, inconsistent and does a whole bunch of unnecessary and useless actions. Having received a new system, instead of any tests, he immediately goes to a new world, and gets into problems that he knows about in advance, and still lets himself be killed, although you can think of a whole bunch of other ways to achieve his desired goal. The hero has a huge fear of deviating from the plot. In the fight with the exorcist, not wanting to kill him, instead of knocking him out, he attacked himself, and at the same time did not give any reasonable explanation for this. He began training only with the invitation from Rias. He never even thought about trying magic. The author constantly forgets what he wrote. Like when was said his new stats were 50 while other devils were around 30. But it turned out that wasn't true. Or like at the beginning of the story, where he said he was good at studying at the academy but it didn't help him succeed in life, and then in the new world he said he was never good at studying. All of this really spoils the story, which could have been much better if the author had thought about it more and been more flexible. Also, the errors in the text are very annoying, as are the wrong words here and there. I suspect this comes from the fact that English is not the author's first language. But I'm not sure.

What 20 points? In that chapter it was written that he got 5 points.

Okay, I’ll be honest, I’m already tired of this term. (Dog Lick) It's used by everyone in the story as if it were the same person with the same set of thoughts. I doubt that anyone even uses such a term. It sounds stupid and unnatural. Use analogues or other descriptions, otherwise it smells of hackwork and childishness.

Not a bad story so far. There are some disadvantages, but not critical. Surprisingly there are no comments.

Well, if he doesn’t interfere where he shouldn’t, he could arrange a very good and rich life for himself.

Korenglish