Raptor2244

The novel is pretty exceptional for someone who's primary language isn't English. I can also see by the way you calculated ages that you've put a lot of effort into the story. However it's not for me unfortunately. The Mc is truly an evil person. Not the kind of ruthless evil necessary to achieve goals or the save villain with a bottom line or even a person who doesn't consider good and evil when making decisions, but a person who revels in their own evil for the sake of evil. A truly vile person. Psychopathic, manipulative, crazy, degenerate, murderous, hypocritical, ungrateful, has no bottom line. The kind of person that will smile at you and hug you and say they love you while taking everything you can give them and then will kill you just because it's fun and act like a crazy serial killer about it. I don't deny that objectively this is a good story, but I can't enjoy reading about such a vile main character.

Well, would you want to be a regular handsome dude in the world of Naruto? Even him not being able to be a powerful ninja without the system almost had me skipping over this novel. You'd probably end up as a gigolo for some wealthy fat noble woman or be dead. I can't possibly imagine why you'd ever want to be someone with no power in a world with superpowers.

I really like this Mc character. He's funny, sows chaos for his own amusement while quietly growing stronger. He's not downright evil (which should be avoided) but he's not a goody two shoes (which should also be avoided). 👍

I know that's why I was laughing at them. Because their billion years of effort led them nowhere and they can't do anything. Ore than they could when they were foundation building. What's the point of seeking power if youre not actually more powerful compared to your environment than you were at the beginning. I much prefer settings like against the gods where they are all part of the same realm with the only real difference being the energy levels of the planets. Sure, they can do less damage on a high level planet, but blowing up a moon or a low energy plenty is trivial and true gods can actually blow up high level stars.

To make it so the story flows, that guy would have to have been close to death when madara and hashirama came along or they wouldn't have been able to form the village. Moreover, madara and hashirama were powerhouses never before seen which is why the could muscle other clans into cooperation.

Here you go brother. This will help in the future. As for what you've already done, just add +10 years onto the characters in his generation when Canon comes around. So instead of being like 25 they will be 35. Also, since the war hasn't started yet, maybe he can save the Uzumaki?

You've got it backwards brother. But I have some ideas for chakra control that he can use. Separating colored sand, carving pictures into dirt, splitting rocks, holding a leaf and then a stone at each chakra point then making them float on him, teaching himself to chakra skate on the ground. Lots of cool ways to bring himself to a higher level.

Author, I'm fairly certain that Kurenai wasn't even born yet at that time. Kurenai, gai, Kakashi, rin and obito were fresh genin during the third shinobi war.

Should I be disappointed that you decided to go with the classic doormat mc/ delusional female trope? I really hope that's a one off. That kind of thing will ruin a book real quick.

This is a translation error. The exact translation via chatgpt is and Google translate is: 'It seems that soon, I, Fujimaru, will become a chakra ton," he thought, glancing thoughtfully at Uchiha Izumi, who was busy in the kitchen, a hint of seriousness flashing in his eyes.' He's saying he's going to be a chakra monster because at 11 he has 30 kakashis worth of chakra whereas 16 year old Naruto has like 4 times as much. (Naruto has 100x more but most of it is used to power the seal that contains the ninetails from what I remember)