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RayVer

RayVer

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New author love to write action and adventure series. Read my novels :)

2021-02-15 BergabungGlobal
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19.1h

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  • RayVer
    RayVer4 months ago
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    A high fantasy novel that follows the journey of an ordinary 17-year-old, who meets an injured red-haired woman in a barren wasteland. Little does he know, she's an enigmatic SSS legend. Stumbling upon this heaven-defying opportunity, he embarks on a path that most could only dream of but never hope to achieve. If you have any questions, feel free to ask in the comment section. Thanks for giving this book a shot. I appreciate it!

  • RayVer
    RayVer3 years ago
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    Send me them power stones bishhhh. Don't be greedy. Let's make a trade powerstones for chapters or even better collections for chapters Every +100 PS = +2 chapters +100 Collections = +2 chapters +200 PS = Extra content (LORE, Character Fact File) Top PS giver will be provided a chance to make an interactive decision in the book every month :)

  • RayVer
    RayVer3 years ago
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    Shameless Author review! With the start of the Spirity contest, I decided to join it with this book of mine. SO check it out and send me those shiny stones, as well as constructive criticism and advice down below. CONSTRUCTIVE YOU HEARD, YES CONSTRUCTIVE!

  • RayVer
    RayVer3 years ago
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    I really like your story premise, and find the characters are realistic and don't feel 2d and flat. The story has plenty of potential and could expand /go down multiple different routes. Little thing to polish up on would be grammar here and there which could be done by proofreading, but by no way does it detract from the story (it's only minor). Overall very good job done.

  • RayVer
    RayVer3 years ago
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    A really interesting premise and execution that has plenty of potential. I've only read 4 chapters so far, however from what I've read it's been very enjoyable. I especially like the world building in use as well as the sense of mystery portrayed that provokes the reader to really think on matters such as the true purpose for why the organisation is making them participate in the events. As well as the limitations of the world they are in. A minor qualm and improvement that I'm sure that could be easily fixed, is the sudden appearance of something for the sake of the plot. I feel that at times the reason why something happens can be quite unnatural but I'm sure it can get better with practice. Overall, I would definitely reccomend you to pick this up as it's an excellent read.

  • RayVer
    RayVer3 years ago
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    Good chapter, however I feel that the idea of why the demon chose him as a partner should be explained further than just 'he needs a host to survive'. However apart from that really excellent immersion.

  • RayVer
    RayVer3 years ago
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    Seems like there is a tiny bit of plot armour creep here. There was supposedly a demon who supposedly had a potion and supposedly helped by giving it to a human who was in dire need of it.

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  • RayVer
    RayVer3 years ago
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    *Sniff**sniff*, I smell a shady organisation.

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  • RayVer
    RayVer3 years ago
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    Story seems really interesting and engaging so far.