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actually to be clear I love this book. this review is out of a wish for the book to improve it is not to be taken as a negative review

while I really enjoyed they zones I find that his plot armor is really annoying. like he happens to meet some bigshot that takes a liking to him every time and it gets old. also I get tired of constantly praising him and how cool and sharp he is with his aura or whatever. this is especially aggregious in terrain. the zones make up for these faults they are well written and interesting I just wish plot armor and constantly reminding the audience how hot and cool he is like a fanboy teen was toned down. he doesn't need every woman in his vicinity to get super attracted to him.

This book is okay but it has some quirks. while the characters are interesting they can be really cartoonish. like the "villains" are written as irredeemable people with no self awareness. they don't feel like actual humans. Some of the dialogue can be very edgy like something a middle schooler would write. what's keeping me going is the non-villan characters and world building. the world is interesting and Sophie's relationship to her dad and peirs is fun. Author if you see this read vampire system and when they transform into bloodsuckers. it's similar to Sophi but done in a more "elegant" way . keep up good work

this author just loves cliff hangers kinda stupid to be honest doesn't make me wanna buy more chapters just makes me want to pirate them lol

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okay uh auto correct hates me use and king not us and kind.

okay look story is decent but I have a large problem. the way it's written is really disorienting. take the synopsis the king says " all the other brothers but the youngest brother." rather than " all but the youngest brother" see how the second sentence flows better. also us he or they sometimes. when the kind is being addressed and speaks you don't need to say the king just say he. I am not trying to be a hater I genuinely want this book to succeed and I'm trying to provide constructive criticism.

great novel and it's totally free. no pay wall bs just a very good unique novel. the mc is rational and not an edge lord a hole like 90% of mc thank God. the side characters are funny and we'll written just all around great novel