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David_Green_61728mthBerkomentarCh 416 No chap today- David_Green_617210mthBerkomentarHe paused and looked at her as she snorted with her arms crossed, "What's it gonna be, magic man?" Ace licked his lips and burst out laughing, "Catch me if you can, your food is trash! Bahahahaha!" as he flipped over the railing and ran off.
- David_Green_617211mthBerkomentar
what???
Daphne glared at Astoria. "That mouth of yours has been fapping too much lately. Do you need a spanking?" - David_Green_61721yrBerkomentarHarry, who was about to answer her first question, came to a screeching halt… |I haven't thought of a name| He admitted lamely. |Maybe, I will be able to come up with something and meanwhile, let me tell you about the functions?| Harry suggested, making Lily chuckle as she eagerly agreed to learn about the Mark. She did see what he was doing through his eyes, but wherever he was doing, he was doing it too fast for her to understand anything.
- David_Green_61721yrDiterbitkan
this seems to be stolen. age of men by cloud9stories on fanfiction website. considering most of it was posted on the same day, I have my doubts that it'll change into being a spin-off based on it. if I'm wrong having not read further than the first couple parts of the first chapter then feel free to reply and I'll take down this review
Buku ini telah dihapus. - David_Green_61721yrBalas PrimalWhiteStar
check his harddrive
Also, just a question. Is it fine to write something in the future regarding MC and Loli Death seggs scene or wait till Death has a more adult body? Though I say loli, she's not the flat kid type but more like Rory Mercury or Shuten Douji sexy LEGAL loli XD. Just asking in case people start complaining about it when I end up doing it :P - David_Green_61722yrBerkomentar
maybe he didn't know he's a wraith
The Last Chamber was a brightly lit large round Room, with the Mirror of Erised in its Center. There was nothing else special about it. He didn't locate any further enchantments, all that was here were the enchantments on the Mirror. In Matthews Opinion this was a wasted chance since Dumbledore could easily use the Room to trap the Wraith of Voldemort here until he found a way to kill him. So many lives could have been saved that way. - David_Green_61722yrBerkomentar
3rd class was how it was described
"Perhaps the ministry thought that books authored by a wizard with the Order of Merlin of the third degree are better?" - David_Green_61722yrDiterbitkan
has the potential to be really good with a good plot and be an all around fun story to read, but every now and then something will pop up that is mindlessly dumb that if the author thought about the words they wrote they could have changed it in seconds. e.g. MC travels 10m/s for 12 seconds to reach a destination a 51 minute bus ride away. 10m/s for 12 seconds is 120 meters which is a bit less than 400 ft. now if they changed it to 5 minutes or something, it would have been made that much easier to read. also a character of given an age of 100 being born in 1922, meaning the year is 2022 when plot events were in ~2011 which just feels like author was lazy and just chose 100 because it was a big number.
- David_Green_61722yrBerkomentar
quickly rather than fastly
VIT: Quantifies how healthy your body is and how fastly it recovers, your HP is equal to VITx100, and your HP regen is equal to VIT - David_Green_61722yrBerkomentar
have you thought about deleting previous announcement chapters as for new readers it can break up the flow a bit. the latest visit can be an announcement but if the announcement isn't relevent anymore, then it is usually best to get rid to declutter as it were.
Ch 111 Rewriting chapters - David_Green_61722yrBalas HermesTheGod
no year 6 you turn 11
"Ohh my little entrepreneur is already starting to make his own Money. I am so proud of you! By the way, on 11th and 12th July, your 7th-grade exams are happening. I left the letter with the details on your desk." cooed his mother. - David_Green_61722yrBerkomentar
he would be in year 7, finishing with year 13 in what would be 7th year, however the years for secondary school and sixth form then were first year - fith year then lower and upper sixth, not sure when this change occurred
"Ohh my little entrepreneur is already starting to make his own Money. I am so proud of you! By the way, on 11th and 12th July, your 7th-grade exams are happening. I left the letter with the details on your desk." cooed his mother. - David_Green_61723yrBerkomentar
these damnable ninjas cutting onions over here...
'Wherever you are, Carl, I hope with all my heart that you too have found someone to love and to protect. I love you, little brother, and no matter how distant we are, you'll always be with me.'