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the thing is it is possible to do that exactly in the first 4 to 5 chapters Not only do you have to do that all in one but in bits adding mystery. That will maybe sound harsh but give me one good reason why I should continue reading a book that lacks originality. with an MC that seems to switch personalities every time he talks. My last hint for you is to start by first finding out who your character is and start living it. Heck maybe get into science labor and ask some people. Don't focus on shitting out two chapters per day and focus on the Character and the world. if you ain't still 12 year old stop making excuses like that. Long enough on webnovel and I heard it all.

so he cured one kind of cancer?

ok I don't even know where to start. I saw that my favourite author recommended your book. I found myself engaged initially, but I must admit that a few aspects left me slightly concerned. The chapter dedicated to the MC backstory for instance, felt somewhat cringe worthy that you separate it from the book. Then the decision to have the character leave his parents due to financial concerns despite their investment and hopes for return, struck me a bit abrupt and lacking in depth. It might be beneficial to explore more nuanced reasons that could justify such a significant choice.Furthermore while the notion of the main characters concern about dying a Virgin added an element of Humor to the story, I couldnt't help but feel that it overshadowed any potential for emotional depth. Balancing humor with genuine emotional development is challenging.As i continued reading, I couldn't help but notice some similarities between the subsequent chapters and pupulare reincarnation novels. While inspiration from successful works can certainly be beneficial, it's crucial to maintain a unique voice and narrative to avoid giving the impression of recycling ideas.

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so he can cure cancer but not aids?

maybe focus on one perspective like you switched from first to third

Oi dude it repeats might wanna delet that

hard to rate with just one chapter but you got me hooked the writing quality is better then most shit you can read here so thx for that

you got me hooked although a little confusing looking forward to what's coming next

The writing quality sadly sounds like a 12 year old who just learned about it in school. You also try to hard to recreate typical manga or anime scenes. Another good hint of mine would be to let your readers use their brains a little you don't have to describe everything. Fighting scenes in 3 person is ok if you can pull it off. A fighting scene needs to give you goosebumps as if you yourself would be in the fight. Quality before quantity! Redo your early chapters please!