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This is better I understand a bit better now

Yeah make auxiliary pages I think they will help understand basic things also I would say try adding things like a character proclaimed this or said this or asked or a character shouted after they talk so we know how they feel other than that this has a lot of potential keep up

done everything is reedited

all corrected dont worry all reedited now

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true sorry bout that its a habit lol

i like the concept towards the first chapter which is what ive read so far it is really cool how it has those scifi aspects to it cant wait to read more definitely adding it to my library.

I really love this story and how the concept is i mean wow the start is sad with the girl losing both of her parents when she was only 9 in a car crash and then grace coming to take care of her i wanna know more about grace she came so suddenly is she evil is she the one tormenting the girl so chilling

i have just read the first chapter so far and cant wait to read more really liking the character Kehna she seems to play a big role in the story and is quite funny cant wait to see how this plays out especially how the setting is in Mexico

Thank you so much I will keep pushing to create a masterpiece