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YoruOtreu

YoruOtreu

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2020-09-17 BergabungGlobal
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7.8h

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  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Diterbitkan

    I really really love this story. It’s worth reading so much. The Art is amazing and the story is so wonderfully crafted with amazing dialogue.

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    Dawns the Gods
    · URSTOFF
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  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Berkomentar

    Oh god, that was an intense start

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    Pandora's Curse: Key To Immortality
    Fantasi · SleepyKola
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  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Balas Shionokami

    👍

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    Endbringer
    Fantasi · Shionokami
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  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Balas Shionokami

    Thank you so much. I’m happy that you enjoyed it! 😊

    altalt
    Belle Deep
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  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Diterbitkan

    Good story. I really like the characters and the story, it sort of reminds me of an anime. You can tell you enjoy writing. There are a few mistakes here and there but it doesn’t really detract from the story. Keep working hard!

    altalt
    Endbringer
    Fantasi · Shionokami
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  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Diterbitkan

    The story is quite humorous and I think your writing style fits quite well with it. The plot also seems very interesting and I’m already forming theories on as to what is actually happening. I enjoy how blunt the main protagonist is. My one and only recommendation would be that in the earlier chapters the main character would have a thought and then repeat the exact same thing out loud. Sometimes this works but since he’s saying it out loud I find it better to just have the dialogue and add on top of it with the thoughts. Other than that I think you’re doing a good job. I look forward to the author continuing the story.

    altalt
    Zhoro's Universe:Loose Screws
    Fantasi · iam_adh
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  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Berkomentar

    This chapter was really good, great job

    Bab ini telah dihapus.
    altalt
    Zhoro's Universe:Loose Screws
    Fantasi · iam_adh
    detail
  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Berkomentar

    So they’re making ternagers amnesiac and then drafting them to war (if not to a mental hospital)

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    altalt
    Zhoro's Universe:Loose Screws
    Fantasi · iam_adh
    detail
  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Berkomentar

    At least it’s customisable

    Bab ini telah dihapus.
    altalt
    Zhoro's Universe:Loose Screws
    Fantasi · iam_adh
    detail
  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Berkomentar

    Son as in *son* or as in a friendly way to refer to him?

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    altalt
    Zhoro's Universe:Loose Screws
    Fantasi · iam_adh
    detail
  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Berkomentar

    You wake up without a memory and the first thing you get to do is play 20 questions. Sounds fun

    Bab ini telah dihapus.
    altalt
    Zhoro's Universe:Loose Screws
    Fantasi · iam_adh
    detail
  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Berkomentar

    Jaja

    Bab ini telah dihapus.
    altalt
    Zhoro's Universe:Loose Screws
    Fantasi · iam_adh
    detail
  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Berkomentar

    Just wanted to say that that eye colour sounds quite beautiful

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    altalt
    Zhoro's Universe:Loose Screws
    Fantasi · iam_adh
    detail
  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Diterbitkan

    I love this so much. The drawings are so beautiful and the writing is quite good. You can see the hard work you put into it. Amazing work! Looking forward to reading more.

    altalt
    Dawns the Gods
    · URSTOFF
    detail
  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Balas SleepyKola

    Thank you very much. I will take it in account and do some editing. 😊 I appreciate it a lot.

    altalt
    Belle Deep
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  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Diterbitkan

    I really enjoyed reading it. The story is fast paced, slightly too much at the beginning for my liking but I dont think there is anything wrong with that since it suits the tale. The writing is really good and creates a vivid world, making you feel for the character when he loses his sibling. I look forward to reading chapters further down the line.

    altalt
    Axed
    perkotaan · Noleafyet
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  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Berkomentar

    Straight to the point

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    Axed
    perkotaan · Noleafyet
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  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Berkomentar

    I like the last sentence quite a bit.

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    Axed
    perkotaan · Noleafyet
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  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Berkomentar

    Seems universities dont change tsk tsk

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    Axed
    perkotaan · Noleafyet
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  • YoruOtreu
    YoruOtreu3yr
    Berkomentar

    :(

    Bab ini telah dihapus.
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    Axed
    perkotaan · Noleafyet
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