Leo_Scheiber_5414

Wasn't it written earlier that the bastion is in elf territory like just south of an elf city, so he's just gonna establish his own nation in elf territory with like 0 population. Bro, what is this writing?

you didn't think about the fact that the characters could've used the favors to get him out of the tournament or for literally anything which gives them ridiculously large amounts of control of him because the end goal you had in mind was them using the favors to learn mana breathing and cleaning from Mc. You forgot common sense and wrote with the pre planned course of events without thinking how stupid they are and the gaps in the story.

Another thing I forgot to mention is that Mc is meant to be an adult but acts like a complete child. Not even like young adult, he literally acts like a kid.

Idk why people praise the writing quality, I've read to chapter 80, and while the English is rly clear, the prose of the text is basic and downright annoying. Neither the character meant to be people or the npc characters talk like normal human beings. it's always off, and the arrangement of text is often off-putting and annoying. For example, a character saying "something something that's interesting" followed by as he looked over with intirest and other such things. The system and plot are interesting, as is the world, but the characters are shallow as hell(Mc included). The author writes in a lot of stuff that's stupid just so he can reach a goal or certain scene he has in mind. For example, in the story, Mc learns soul magic, which allows him to enter a kind of soul contract with another being and use some of their strength as well as summon them. However, this magic brings the risk of him losing control if he gets to emotional (shocking Mc losing control cliche, also doesnt this sound like VERY vital information for someone doing soul magic) the stupid part is the fact that both his mentors just don't tell him about this when they have every chance to do so and posses knowledge of this and the fact that he can do soul magic and has a strong soul contracted. They didn't tell Mc because author wanted to write a "Mc almost loses control scene" and THEN have the mentors tell him about the whole important losing control thing after he almost kills himself. Not like they could have (and following common sense) should've told him immediately and started him on mental control training he does after losing control.

yeah I probably couldve written the comment better, sorry, I was just kinda annoyed at the not so fluid writing .

Author I just wanted to mention that chapters 32 and 33 are labeled as errors and currently contain text from the chapters of your other book unusual world. Might wanna look into that.

I gave this a 3.8 because there haven't been enough chapters for me to really tell how good character design and world background are and the stability of updates so far doesn't seem so good so I gave them all a 3, but I swear this has to be the first novel with genuinely good writing quality. I mean this is the quality you'd expect from someone who went to college and is actually good at writing. This by far has the best writing quality on webnovel in my opinion. The story development is also really good so far. There haven't been many chapters but how the author is setting up the main character and giving us flashbacks to tell us how the main character kind of thinks and feels about the whole 'hope' thing his parents do. Honestly keep it up author[img=recommend].

I'm really liking the story but oh my lord this grammar. You're making me die on the inside author.