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    I gave it a chance. Read ten chapters, found myself skimming through it by the end. The prose needs a lot of work, the scenes have no suspense and the overall story just doesn't have anything that warrents my continued interest. This kid is already 18 and still a nobody. If it was intentional, then that just means the author has no foresight. LEGENDS are the best, and they show it early on. Messi being a prime example. Him STARTING at 18 already makes him far worse then his competitors it terms of future fame. I'm disappointed with it, but it seems like a trend with sport novels. Every author botches the beginning.

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    Fist chapter was good, I got excited for a strategist/puppet master that controls the court through intelligence rather than pure skill. Similar to the redhead from kuroko no basket. I got that impression from his observation about the need for teamwork and communication. Anyway, it all went down hill from there. The Mc is a puppet, not the puppet master. He’s a slave to the system, and the author completely discards all the build up about his theoretical aptitude. Incredibly disappointing and irriating to read. I stopped shortly after. Awesome potential, waste on the wrong author. I recommend starting this with low expectations to avoid having them shattered.

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    Balas Human_thing

    Just finishing off my assessments for uni, I'll get right on the next chapter! Ty for your patience.

    "And there we have it folks, the first win of the battle goes to Rex and his Scizor. That is not to say Pikachu did not perform exceptionally, after all, this is the most damage Scizor has ever take." James said passionately.
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    Balas Mysticwolf

    Didn't even think about Romania and the vampires. Damn, Might have to add that in. ahaha

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    Balas Marian_Domnescu_2544

    Completely understandable. That's why I'm currently in the process of rewriting it all from scratch, then replacing everything at once. Look forward to it, as there won't be any of the issues you have aptly pointed out. Thank you for your input, I value honesty and criticism as it helps me identify problems.

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    The novel presents an intriguing premise but suffers from poor execution. The dialogue is excessively verbose and often nonsensical, severely impacting the story's credibility. The protagonist, Jon, behaves inconsistently with his supposed age, resembling someone in their late teens or early twenties rather than his actual age (9). This disconnect, alongside poor portrayals of other important characters (including their decisions and dialogue) highlights the author's lack of understanding of the characters, further detracting from the narrative. Additionally, the reliance on the trope of "the old gods granting knowledge" as a convenient explanation undermines the plot's integrity. Overall, a promising idea, but not her more.

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    Balas Orions

    I'm glad! I hope to read your comments and thoughts when I post the new version.

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    Balas 1Manager1

    in progress :)

    The ruins
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    Balas Orions

    Nah, I just had one last chapter saved that needed posting. I'm fully focused on rewriting now.

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    Balas Immortal_Duck7

    I haven't decided yet. I initially wanted to replace the chapters, but I might make it an entirely different novel.

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    Balas Mysticwolf

    Those are all amazing ideas, thank you!

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    Balas jess_weston

    I really appreciate it!

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    Balas Mysticwolf

    Well I would love your opinion, my idea for the change was this (Makes a pact with Spirit Dragons (that look like chinese dragons) after Arthur Pendragon did them a favour which saved them from great peril. They have no physical form. From there, every Pendragon goes to that sacred place, and makes a pact with A dragon spirit, capable of harnessing their powers after going through several trials, each one unlocking more powers) your idea is great as well, what do you think needs changing, what could I incorporate?

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    Balas Hades109

    I'm ashamed to admit I hadn't thought about that. We can cover both, it could be interesting to see how both sides affect each other in close proximity.

    Jenna tapped her pen against her notebook. "I'm planning to chart our journey there, you know. From the ruins in Cairo to the monasteries in the Himalayas. We could learn so much about how different cultures shape their magical practices."
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    Balas W2Nerdy

    No, i really want to limit his legacies. He probably won't get any more honestly.

    The video shifted to a narrative clip. [After this defeat, he vanished into the wilderness. When he returned, his Noivern had transformed, now marked by unmatched savagery and formidable strength.]
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    Balas W2Nerdy

    I really appreciate you're comments! I do have these bursts of guilt for neglecting this story especially when I read comments such as yours. I love the passion, and I'm glad I was able to provide such a rich experience for you. I don't plan to ever drop this story, thought as you would've noticed, the update rate is extremely slow. I plan to pick it up again, changing a lot for the next region, since I know I would go back and change a lot of things. It doesn't really feel like Pokemon anymore, it's gotten out of hand. So if I do ever get to the next region, I plan on grounding it more, making simpler. I hope you'll stick around, and I appreciate the support. Much love.

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    Balas HeavenRefining

    nah, just been busy, i'll drop a chapter soon!

    Ch 221 The battles rage on
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    Balas Human_thing

    no, just been very busy, I'll write one very soon!

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    Balas Lunatic_17

    more like a computer analysing the data, and coming up with ways to prevent it from ever happening again sort of thing.

    Everyone was shocked, his learning ability was immense. You can only do the same attack once before it learns a counter. As Godzilla was fighting, he was downloading recorded battles on the internet and analysing them for strategies. It would then cross-reference them with the current battle to create the most optimal approach.
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