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I came to read Omniscient Reader, stayed for everything else
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Zarek8_31_071dDiterbitkanIt's got a decent story premise, but the amount of things wrong with this work could fill an essay. there are multiple breaks in the work that make it very obvious that this was written out using talk to text, chat GPT, and other tools of the like, which isn't inherently bad but it wasn't edited in the slightest and needs a full revision to be even close to grammatically correct in some portions. The character design is the most flagrant of issues in this fanfiction, with all of the characters not acting even remotely how they would in the Type/Moon universe. to be honest this feels more like a Greece mythology fanfiction than a Fate one; other than some basic characters added in, nothing lines up with the Type/Moon universe.
- Zarek8_31_072dBalas JonRedSea
I mean, the MAIN type/moon protagonist is Shirou. Enough said
—Neither of you is any better. Why is the emotional intelligence of the people around me so low? - Zarek8_31_072dBerkomentar
indeed it is really good
Check out Fate/Inspired. It's peak frfr. Trust. - Zarek8_31_072dBerkomentar
favorite portrayal of mad scientist so far
Gib some comments bros. - Zarek8_31_072dDiterbitkan
please for the love of fuck, LEARN TO USE PUNCTUATION. It is downright painful to read blocks of text without quotations where someone is pretty clearly speaking. This is a problem that persists in even the latest chapter (97). Reading is supposed to be enjoyable, but it's really a chore when you have to put brain power into interpreting what is dialogue and what is internal thoughts or what is just narrative description.
- Zarek8_31_073dBerkomentarCh 35 Chapter 34: Fox Hunting Season!!!
- Zarek8_31_073dBalas AC_adaptor_the_2
Artoria doing better than in canon
Shirou decided to leave the scene without drawing attention to himself. He had no desire to watch the Live version of "Fate/zero" or to hear Iskandar's insults directed towards Kayneth in order to protect Waver. Furthermore, the outcome of the battle at the docks was different than what he had expected. Artoria and Diarmuid fought fiercely, and Artoria never removed her armor during the fight, which rendered Diarmuid's "Yellow Rose of Mortality" ineffective and prevented him from causing any serious or permanent injuries. - Zarek8_31_073dBerkomentar
personally, i'm loving it. as long as the chapters keep coming and the work isn't dropped, your readers will fully support you
So I'm taking it you guys don't like this much? - Zarek8_31_074dBalas Ranfys_Cogley
there's a reason Shinji becomes such a good spiritron hacker
But, fuck you fate, I'll make you regret making me leaning into technology. - Zarek8_31_074dBerkomentar"And your mother said she liked this finger best."
- Zarek8_31_075dBerkomentarCh 51 Chapter 51
- Zarek8_31_075dBalas MrIIIo
feeling less pain after the water was because it increased his tolerance to it, not because it weakened his nerve endings
Now that the pain was no longer clouding his mind, could somebody please tell him why the fuck he didn't ask Dende to heal him while fleeing from Dodoria? It would have spared him from having to face Dodoria altogether! Ajax could only pin the blame on the pain because not doing that had been stupid as hell. - Zarek8_31_075dBalas Equuleus_Nox"M-mercy! I'll turn a new leaf! Or we can team up– cough–against Frieza!" Dodoria rasped desperately as blood spilled from her lips. "You look... like a Saiyan! I know a se–secret about the demise of your r-race! I'll tell you e-everything—as long as you let me live!"
- Zarek8_31_075dBalas MrIIIo
pain is a bodily function to tell you when to stop doing something, or to alert you when something is wrong. He doesn't adapt to the pain because there is nothing to adapt to.
Now that the pain was no longer clouding his mind, could somebody please tell him why the fuck he didn't ask Dende to heal him while fleeing from Dodoria? It would have spared him from having to face Dodoria altogether! Ajax could only pin the blame on the pain because not doing that had been stupid as hell. - Zarek8_31_077dBerkomentar
the levels of foreshadowing hundreds of chapters later on this merciless roast are incredible
"When a husband fails to communicate with his wife, a father with his child, or a king with his subjects, it leads to chaos and disorder. Tell me, should I praise you blindly and overlook your mistakes, or will you use your holy sword to force me to sing your praises? Your supposed greatness and righteousness?" - Zarek8_31_078dBerkomentar
looking back on this after hundreds of chapters, i wonder just how far in advance the author planned
Shirou decided to leave the scene without drawing attention to himself. He had no desire to watch the Live version of "Fate/zero" or to hear Iskandar's insults directed towards Kayneth in order to protect Waver. Furthermore, the outcome of the battle at the docks was different than what he had expected. Artoria and Diarmuid fought fiercely, and Artoria never removed her armor during the fight, which rendered Diarmuid's "Yellow Rose of Mortality" ineffective and prevented him from causing any serious or permanent injuries. - Zarek8_31_079dBerkomentar
lol, it seems arcane hearing beats dimensional light
The day had gotten worse with Lily Potter being alive, somehow, and the journal turning to ash before he could read anything. That last one was the final nail in the coffin. The diary was the genuine article; Albus could recognize Nicholas' work anywhere, and now it was gone, and it was such a stupid mistake. - Zarek8_31_079dBalas Equuleus_Nox
my parents are literally watching that movie as I type this. The irony is mind numbing
Ajax was so focused on Dodoria that he almost missed it—a faint string of orange and green energy snaking toward him in the air from a small distance away. It curled and writhed like a worm, inching ever closer from behind ominously. - Zarek8_31_0710dBalas Bobyslurp23
sorry for the confusion, it was just a fun fact related to the topic
From then on, the green ranger and the professor became my heroes.