average_ff_enjoyr

arguably the worst way to go about it, i can't remember a single ff with an important OC (that is not the insert) that worked, it is always a 1 d character that is as bland as paper that has no reason to be added to the story. it takes some series skill to make an oc good enough to be an addition to the ff, and if an author has that skill what the hell is he doing writing a ff he should make an original novel.

what ... ?? dude this is a fan fic i have different expectation for it then an og novel, like for example the insert in the fanfic interacting with the original ip's characters not some badly written random nobody oc that no one knows or cares for.

the edge, not my cup of tea expressly when it is written like this telling instead of showing, there were some hints but doing it like this makes it feel rushed.

that is all you see in rosse ? you ignore all the other redeeming qualities and just focus on tits. buddy you are just projecting. ps. there is nothing sona can do rosse can't d better, sorry dude facts are facts sona only exists to make raias look more appealing.

sure why not ? as long as you continue posting chapters here and put like 5 to10 advanced chapter in patreon no one can complain.

just use energy or curse energy to stay in theme no need to add mana.

+1

starting of very good, can't wait to see where it goes. hoping for a romantic sub-plot nothing major but something to brake the action and training arcs here and there.