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I haven't dropped it. Just a little more busy these days. I will start updating again next month most likely.
Well the story is till being written. But looking at things as of now I don't think our MC is interested in romance at all.
Great synopsis. Also I like the starting a lot which speaks volumes as I get bored easily . The character arc of Eva also feels very nice and natural, overall great job.
Great I quite like the way you set up and directly introduced the characters. The way the characters are written is quite interesting because it makes good scenes. Just one little tip. Maybe you can write "Cyrus" directly, "Beta Cyrus" Sounds weird.
I am the no romance type of guy but this is quite fun to read. A sure time banger ! Great job in making this feel entertaining. 4.6/ 5 I hope you write more!
Sup! Writing Quality: Its quite readable. But I don't like the way grammar is structured in many places, for example the way when you introduce the Qi Gathering Technique. Stability of Updates: Too early to say anything but I think you will do amazing here. Story Development: My biggest gripe is this. You have a unique concept and hit it write but why the hell do you introduce so many tropes in the beginning, it makes me bored and think this is another copy of Wuxia Novels. Character Design: Good Work here, I feel they are quite natural. WB: Yup again you have great idea. You are building from bottom to top so I would like to feel a lot more tension and mystification of things. Overall the biggest problem is the beginning of the Story. It feels boring but if you can make it more intense and full of mystery then this would be a 5 star Novel !
Love the concept utilized here in this novel. Ghosts, Humour and a little romance always makes for a good story. Overall its cool! Good job!
Nicely done. I really liked the way you build up tension and then introduce the characters and their environment. Quite exciting I must say!
Thanks for your feedback :) If you read carefully you will find Atreus is quite shrewd. He wont give recipes for free to anyone.
I am flattered you would say that, thanks for your encouraging words.