ArcSan
This is my page everyone, I am a Major In English Literature and an aspiring writer. Hope we all get along!
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Sup! Writing Quality: Its quite readable. But I don't like the way grammar is structured in many places, for example the way when you introduce the Qi Gathering Technique. Stability of Updates: Too early to say anything but I think you will do amazing here. Story Development: My biggest gripe is this. You have a unique concept and hit it write but why the hell do you introduce so many tropes in the beginning, it makes me bored and think this is another copy of Wuxia Novels. Character Design: Good Work here, I feel they are quite natural. WB: Yup again you have great idea. You are building from bottom to top so I would like to feel a lot more tension and mystification of things. Overall the biggest problem is the beginning of the Story. It feels boring but if you can make it more intense and full of mystery then this would be a 5 star Novel !
Thanks for your feedback :) If you read carefully you will find Atreus is quite shrewd. He wont give recipes for free to anyone.
Ah got it. Thanks for pointing out.
Well. I guess it only makes sense that I write a introduction here now that some chapters are up and readers have something to read. Well I have whole heartedly tried to create a story that my readers can enjoy while also trying to take care that normal pitfalls don't come up in my Writing that make the reading a frustrating experience. If you have any suggestions, please dont hesitate to type them, I will genuinely try to listen to advice if anybody reads my work!