StoryfortheAges

Premise seems to be done in a nicely-planned manner. Zila and Kay are really interesting leads, and the dynamic between them leaves a lot of potential. Have read the earlier chapters, and surely some of the easier formatting could be improved, but overall, a really nice and fun read!!

Cool first chapter. Zila seems like a very promising MC, and that first part of the chap really did build up questions to remember for the future.. A suggestion though, for any parts with texting, I think it's better for the format to be --> 《Character Name》: ~Insert Text~ I don't know, just seems neater. Anyways, looking forward to read more!

Great premise, certainly a first for me in this platform! Wonderfully done to make you feel for the MC, not too much and not too little. Character's are mostly fine, although the whole conflict between the MC and the royalties really did sell me on the whole thing. Great descriptions and certainly a nice flow of writing, a style which I can day I like. Now onto things that could be improved: 1) Usage of long paragraphs really need some re-editing. Don't overuse them, make it so that when they do come, they come with am impact. Having more than one every now and then makes it hard to follow. 2) You make the narrator as being its own character... Now this, is a bold move. Not to say it's necessarily a bad thing, but it certainly come off as jarring at first. Maybe that's one thing you can tinker about. But anyways, that's mostly what I got from these first five chapters. Solid start, now it's all up to you to follow up. Just do your thing, and keep on striving for greatness.

Just caught up with the whole thing, and ooh boy, I'm sold on this book! Really interesting conflict you've got going on, and I love the Reaper too as a character! Anyways, looking forward for more chapters to come..

I think applying more full-stops here would be nice. Give the readers time to breathe and take in what's going on... And more importantly, paints a clearer picture.

This paragraph's kinda lost to me :/

The concept's really growing on me! Although one thing I do notice is that you indeed like to make long sentences... It isn't a bad thing, but when it's unnecessary, it's best to break things down into separate ideas. But, if that's your style or was intended, then... Who am I to change that? Overall though, I'm intrigued

Hahah, Guquan sounds like such a dear! Hoping nothing bad happens..

Very short, although pretty well-written, first chapter. Surely could use some retouching with the grammar and wording, but the way u get straight to the meat of the story with the whole Reaper shennanigans is appreciated!

A really riveting read! Has an interesting world built around the story, and the writing's top-notch as well! Has a cool idea behind it, so I can't wait to read more!