Bored1235

A few words either misspelled or in Spanish randomly, updates seemingly at a whim so no consistency, otherwise a pretty good and fun story

do you have a release schedule? or is it more of a do it when you are free?

tail detachment + gunpowder generation + some sensory type skill for proximity and maybe you have a natural way to lay mines/bombs

random thought, but what would happen if he randomly encountered peter and the kids from Narnia in Britain. i mean they would eventually roam around and maybe encounter each other randomly what with how harry potters setting is somewhere around the british isles

would i pay $20 usd a month for 20 advanced chapters? no, definitely no. the translation is good, however it basically takes inspiration from what seems to be the translating it but instead makes it into a different story as if it is the right work it starts with no players before release unlike here where, if i remember correctly, he is playing in parallel if not a bit later from when players started as he runs into "steve" . This does not make it bad but i would personally see this as an inspired story as the original work diverges from this very quickly.

mystery box

Clove = immortality and self revive

forgot while writing the review but the only real issue imo is the weird random pov swaps woth no warning, after a bit you get used to it but it would be nice to jave something to separate and show where a pov change happens

do you know which novel this was adapted from. i dont remember what it was called but i am pretty sure i read some of it on this site

See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule