light_the_fox

good story bad translating for example when a character is talking about their beasts they keep saying beast taming instead like what is the name of your beast taming instead of just beast

ahhh the best thing for a shut in never need to cook the instant meal

i don't think you meant "Beaking" but "Pecking" instead

well if everyone can stop with the differences and strong arming each other we all can work together and actually advance the world instead of trying to be the superior and take over

minor fix needed instead of "think" should be "thought"

but this could be a good thing i mean imagine if all the world leaders got together and just got high it'd be a great day for humanity

could barely read this do to the grammar in this story needs some major edits at least for English unsure if its correct in other languages but English definitely not

fair trade though you get a massive power boost and all you have to do is never do the deed

so essentially a portal that if the elves are raided in someway or compromised then the enemy could raid daniels base through the elves?