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Thx for the chapter. Quick question how do you go about planning the next volume. Do you plan out every event in detailed order, or do you just write and see where the wind takes you ?

I think the best theory is that it was Mukai Kohinata’s somehow. It’s the best theory I’ve heard so far. No body really knows.

No i agree. I like the fact that Asterion is still strong but you have essentially constructed a story where he still faces challenges even with his strength. And you added in a blend of mystery into Herpo and left the readers curious for more. Very Well executed.

Great chapter and great fic. Love it

Would have like to see some actual dialogue between Edward and the Asgardians. To establish their characters well initially. It felt very brief and just a summary of an events before the chapter ended.

Ye I get what you mean, I’m annoyed aswell when mc’s go on this grand journey but completely forget about love romance and kids, because those aspects are a natural part of a story. I actually like the fact that your Mc had kids and is such a good father but I would like to occasionally see some development that is ‘Main character exclusive’ if you get what I mean. Like in your Daeron the good story, I have to go the auxiliary chapter to find out who the people in the chapter are, because you mc has so many wives and children haha 😅. But Its obvious from the get go that was the direction your story was going, so I’m not gonna give out. Overall I love your stories and I will gladly read them and your future projects.

Of course I understand. Anybody reading the story early on should kinda know what there getting themselves into. What ideas do you want, for your Martel story or the Daeron the good story ? Cuz I have a few for both .

What I mean by personal development is just that, the MC. In both of your stories the chapters are just filled with his sons, children and wives and the interactions between them, whether they be slice of life or lemons. The children and wives are becoming a central theme in your stories. I’m not saying thats bad, I just wish there would be more focus on the main character himself and his development throughout the story. When you combine so many different characters and plot lines all at the same time, you kinda of take away from the mc and his importance. That just my opinion and it doesn’t mean I don’t like the stories, it’s just a matter of preference.

I like the cover aswell. I assume you going to structure you main character’s around the figure at the top of the cover pic?

Ooh yeah I have read that fic and I did enjoy it. The author had a bit of difficultly with character development along such a huge timeline so the only advice I would give is establish the characters well at first and don’t be afraid to some time skips here and there. The author is in breeze through eternals had to somehow get his characters from the Age of Babylon to modern day which is quite tricky from a Author’s perspective so I wish you the best of luck and I can’t wait to read it😅👍

Fair enough. I’d rather quality chapters every once in a while, than bad chapters bc you’re burning yourself out. Any ideas you have for future projects ?

Kind of agree. I don’t think it’s bad but I think there’s too much of it. There should be more focus on the MC and his personal development as a character in my opinion.

Why would the Author need to nerf the MC for the Riser Fight? It’s pretty clear that the MC is way more powerful and is only being given to Rias’s peerage as a loan. After the Fight, he becomes high class instantly.

+1

It’s a one tomoe at the moment I think. And yes normally any level of the Sharingan can use genjutsu , but I think author made a statement of wanting the Mc learn some stuff slowly by himself.

Tbh I was expecting more of an elvish sword? Ye know bc the whole theme of the mc and his family, is that their all elves.