Overall there is a great understanding with how the story is laid out, allowing the reader to fully understand the scenes and how everything works towards helping a better image to be created for the viewer,

All in all great opening leaving me with questions I hope’ll be answered throughout the story

Hey glad to hear you like the story but currently im not interested in joining and contest or going further with it, its more for fun for anyone to just Read :) ill be Taking a beeak from the story for a long while but the story will continue with more story and character