Was a really food read. Can't wait for another chapter. I'm currently on chapter 17 Hesh. Please update soon. I just going to write more words to fulfill the 140 characters needed to leave a review. If you read this, I'd don't know, eat a bagel. I've been craving bagels recently. How about you?

Honestly, please get someone to proofread this please. While I want to read further, I can't bring myself to. If you are able to get a 3rd party to come in and redo the writing, the dialog especially, then I think the story will do much better.