Nasser98

Didn't yakuchi make it to koshein even they lost at final , cause west tokyo win the lottery

A lot of bullshits , it's clearly that the author no shit about football or how the teams run

If you are making the mc a pussy why even bother to write a fan-fic , we already got that in the original, a fan-fic mc need to have more quality and positive vibes

Fights, kidnappe, killing , every time an accident...

Why you do it even knowing 99% of the readers won't hesitate to drop the story if you add another person with system , plus with the mc arrogance and naivety it's get even worse . Good luck bro , but remember to who you writing the story for , my you idea is good , but you have to follow the readers taste

Great story, bro! I've really enjoyed it from the very first chapter to the latest one. You've got something special here. However, I have a suggestion: consider drawing inspiration from Japanese sports manga and anime, especially when it comes to adding emotional depth. Series like Diamond no Ace or Haikyuu!! excel at incorporating sad or challenging moments without diving too deep into dark themes. Right now, it feels like you're introducing some really heavy, dark elements that don't quite fit the tone of a sports story, which should be more about youth, energy, and the spirit of competition. It's totally fine to have the main character face struggles on their journey to the top, but there are more fitting ways to explore those setbacks without turning every 50 chapters into a tragedy. You’re crafting an excellent story, and I truly believe it could be even better if you lightened up on the darker elements. I love your work, and I genuinely appreciate your storytelling. I just wanted to share my thoughts because I think your story has the potential to be even more enjoyable. Keep up the great work

Great story, bro! I've really enjoyed it from the very first chapter to the latest one. You've got something special here. However, I have a suggestion: consider drawing inspiration from Japanese sports manga and anime, especially when it comes to adding emotional depth. Series like Diamond no Ace or Haikyuu!! excel at incorporating sad or challenging moments without diving too deep into dark themes. Right now, it feels like you're introducing some really heavy, dark elements that don't quite fit the tone of a sports story, which should be more about youth, energy, and the spirit of competition. It's totally fine to have the main character face struggles on their journey to the top, but there are more fitting ways to explore those setbacks without turning every 50 chapters into a tragedy. You’re crafting an excellent story, and I truly believe it could be even better if you lightened up on the darker elements. I love your work, and I genuinely appreciate your storytelling. I just wanted to share my thoughts because I think your story has the potential to be even more enjoyable. Keep up the great work

I dislike when the autor try making thé mc smart , but he stupid to do that

Thanks for the chapter bro 🥰🥳 , But that's toooooo short 😭

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