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If this is a question, the way (this one is actually hard for me to come up with an alternative word, but essentially the experience of) you hold (keep) your gaze (attention) ignites (starts a warm feeling instead of a fire in this case)

The writing quality isn't bad, but some words aren't used within their usual English usages, although their definitions aren't wrong for the meaning. The story starts out grim, and though it moves along well, I think the main character might have lived more happily if she'd run away in the first chapter. I hope she makes it to a happy ending. Easy to follow, heart wrenching, glimpses of riches beyond our grasp, glimpses of corruption most of us don't have to rub up against. Good luck to all, characters and readers.

Green is voluntarily set. Wants to participate in PVP. Yellow attacked a non PvP, red killed non PvP

Unfortunately there’s not. The flag is basically just an undismissable marker, and a sign that there’s no penalty for attacking

Fortunately or unfortunately, I wrote these chapters too close to brain surgery and didn’t write down my thoughts at the time, so my own reconstruction of the why is a bit muddled. But good call, kind of wish I’d used it , lol.

I’m not familiar with that story, but since I’m echoing old stories here, similarity with others is unavoidable.

The author has improved over time! I found the first few chapters confusing and jumbled feeling, mostly due to the way they were written. It was not exactly wrong, but pretty clear that it wasn't by a native English speaker back then. The adjectives used, and order of sentences, were just... odd. Very descriptive, but weird. The latest chapters flow much more easily, despite the characters angst and plotting. I'm not sure it's any less tangled, but it's no longer tangled up in technicalities! You've grown a lot! I hope you'll keep writing.[img=recommend]

Your writing improved a lot over time.

These notes of encouragement have kept me trying to finish the tale. Thank you.

Thank you. I really want to reach the end of the story before I die if things go badly though, so it might feel a little rushed, but I'll keep following my outline.