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The quality of this fanfic would increase 10x if the naruto aspect was completely absent.

Reading these stupid loooong af naruto abilities is already giving me a headache

Yeah it's unfortunate, nobody really knows how to make DB fanfics appealing. They're usually slow to the point of being a slog fest, which is terrible being that fanfic's almost never go beyond 200-300 chaps.

Please for all that is good, STOP using long drawn out japanese/chinese words. Just practical, short named techniques plz.

You're an idiot

Haha, so far this is actually extremely boring. MC gonna look like an old man when plot starts and be a side character?? Zzzzzz

Yeah it's poop water. For some reason ppl can't nail a Dragon Ball fanfic with a human original MC.

please please STOP with the different POV's!! Just write the story from the MC's point of view. It's so bad switching POV's

This is so stupid and on a level of disbelief and cannot comprehend. No way is an asian going around buying weapons in a wwII era United States. That boy would be bagged and rushed to a nearby wwII concentration camp faster than you could say Bingchillin

Is he Chinese with the name Josh??! It's funny chinese are so racist but they are "sometimes" self aware enough to realize their names are stupid af