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I read a bit further now and I gotta say it is getting worse and worse. The author is still over-explaining everything as if his readers were 6 yo like his protagonist. Also, the amount of 'cheats' he is freely throwing at his MC is still increasing and it is starting to be ridiculous. Every single one of these cheats has the potential to make a good story. But all of them together? It's just too much to be really enjoyable. On top of that, the Dimensional Chat Group hasn't even appeared yet and probably won't until this story is at least at ch200 or something with this pacing. The pacing is really atrocious. This is the kind of story that would need 1000 chapters to get somewhere. The author truly embraced the Chinese Dao of Cultivation Writing and ascended to the realm of Writing without Substance. It's kinda disappointing to see all the potential in this idea wasted like this. But oh, well, it is what it is.
Yes. That is the biggest problem of this fic and what ruined it. The author has a good idea. Good premise. Reasonable and intelligent MC (from what I have seen so far) and that is very rare nowadays. His writing is also great. But the pacing. Oh my Munchkin, the pacing. It is utter garbage. Over 10k words just to describe MCs abilities and cheats? WTF? If the author just thought for a second about that fact and put himself in the position of the reader, I am sure he would figure out where he failed. And seriously, he seems to have talent. He seems to be able to make a likable MC. But holy sheet, he really needs to stop over-explaining things and start writing an actual story instead of a summary of his character's cheats. One chapter, maybe two (and that is stretching it already) should be enough to explain MCs abilities. If it takes more, then you gave your MC FAR TOO MANY CHEATS. It's as simple as that. Just think. As a writer, how are you going to balance all these cheats within the story progression? You are just making the life harder for yourself. Give the MC 1 or 2 good things and the rest can be acquired within the story. Preferably with a good plotline. Sigh, Sorry. I could rant and rant about this but I think I got my main point across with this. Have a nice day.
The funny thing is that compared to what some of those old Ancestors in Cultivation stories can do, even those four Chaos Gods would be pretty much nothing but children having a tantrum. If I was the writer, that would be my reason why this is 'only' gold tier reward.
This is what I like about this author. Usually, if the MC behaved like Yuna, I'd be annoyed af and write some scathing comment about him being a complete ret*rd. But this author simply proves that it is not about 'what' is written but 'how' it is written. If you can sell it in a likable manner even stupid actions can become good content.
Mhm. Now you know why they ended up together, eh? They simply understand each other so well.
Yeah, you'd have to be a special kind of idiot to do this in a fic. It's aggravating. The fic didn't even start properly yet there is already some kind of end boss gunning out for the MC when he is barely just a toddler. Really now? It's just so stupid and cheapens the whole premise.
Mhm, I read the reviews on this story after reading it and this is the one closest to what I think of it so I will be putting my opinion here. The MC does st*pid sh*t and honestly, if he did not have his system, he would be lost and useless.I don't have a problem with the MC being a 'decent' person but he is just not considering the consequences and risks of his actions. He is practically just your another incompetent MC whose a*s is saved by his system. That said, the story is not badly written. Just the plot and MCs actions are contradictory with his intentions and are also highly questionable the second you actually start to use your brain to think about what the heck he is actually doing and how risky it is for him. The dude described MCs actions well in this review and how they contradict his intentions. It just makes no sense. Also, with the current pacing of the story and the length of the chapters (I got to around ch24 or so), there would have to be like 300 chapters for it to get somewhere. Which does not fill me with confidence. But hey, that's just my opinion.
Dude... Chill. The comment is right. The plan is really st*pid af. There might be some obscure reason to do this or he is just thinking it is the right thing to do but honestly? He is extremely weak right now. Just going to Karakura is a huge risk. Most people in that situation would think along the lines, 'How can I become strong enough to survive', yet this MC thinks more along the lines of, 'What ridiculously convoluted scheme can I pull off that will most likely get me killed?'. That's the problem of this. You may disagree. And you probably had a plan in mind while writing this. Nothing wrong with that. But the way this comes off to me, as a reader, is that it is just unnecessarily complex BS while the MC should be focused on getting strong first before trying to figure out how to save the world because he has a hero complex. The whole planning to save Masaki... sure go for it but not now. It is just far too soon. He is too weak to think about that right now. And besides, he was 10 years 'unconscious' no? Shouldn't Masaki already be dead by this point?
Alright. I won't continue past this and I announce my department for all those people who want to post a gif about not needing to do so. Have at it, guys. Anyway, Mr. Author, the story is good and well-written. Unfortunately, it is also good at putting me to sleep. There isn't much excitement in it and I feel that it would take 200 chapters for something to finally happen. The encounter with the Hokage was good. But short. The HentaiGodZ chapter was hilarious and it was the first time I had actual fun reading this story. And when I realized that little tidbit... it hit me like a truck my interest just plummeted to near zero. The story is not bad. Not at all. But it is not good either. Not exciting by any means. Not thrilling. I feel like it's just enough to keep my attention but not enough to actually make me properly entertained. I tried to go further and see if I find something interesting but I didn't. To be fair, this is more of a 'me' problem. I am sure there will be people liking the story. But for me, it is not.
Praise the Third Hokage! The strongest Hokage! ... Yeaaaah, about that. Respectable indeed.
What a cruel MF. Poor worms.
Oh, sweet summer children...
Nah. It's good. You had a good balance so far.
Hold up. Wait a minute. Something ain't right. You want to tell me a dude from Ancient China knows about the brain and how it works in correlation with control of the body? Hmmmm... sus! (Sorry. I know. I am nitpicking. But I just couldn't help myself, Mr. Author, since you were all about making him act like a proper person from Ancient China. Don't mind me :D)
Sigh. Here I was hoping for Mt Tai. I guess the MC is yet another one who has eyes but has never seen Mt. Tai.
Heh. Don't forget the gambling debts that come free with her, lol.
Since nobody is doing it...
It's Chinese, mate. You should expect people in Chinese fics to act stupidly. Sure, it happens in Western fics too. But it is a major trait of Chinese fics just like the Japanese make their MC with the harem gathering dense d*mba*s template in their novels. It is really hard to find Chinese fic with characters that can use their upper head properly.
I don't think you are. They literally met at the graveyard when Tsunade was mourning Nawaki. At least, that's what I remember from anime.