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I find the change of point of view very confusing, it changes very often

That you had to justify yourself in the comments shows that you didn't write it well. The MC has internal thoughts, and you just skipped the thoughts of the plans. And this is the beginning of the story, so we don't know the personality of the MC Which makes you an unreliable narrator, and readers who want a light read don't really like that narration, there is already a lot of variety of stories to read, and to save time we discard stories according to the personality of the Mc or the ways he narrates. .

If he wants to have some kind of official power, that only belongs to him. I think this is the only way to ascend socially.

I'm hating the way you portray his personality, because you bothered to create a past in which he's over 100 years old, and also spent countless years in the reincarnation test, but sometimes you portray him as mature and patient, but other times as a teenager who can't hide his emotions. It's really irritating when you do the latter, because it creates an inconsistent character. The same thing happens with Selene, who at the beginning you showed her with a personality that made it impossible for her to hide her fear, terror, anxiety, etc. But now she is the perfect assassin who knows how to hide all the emotions. I hope you take it as a constructive criticism.

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It is not to develop feelings, and be casual.

Es una tradición la auto-reseña, espero que les gusta la pequeña historia que escribire y espero con ansias sus comentarios y calificaciones

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