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What about Sima?

Aww caught up

I wonder is this our Kenpachi :P

Is Akira 1st or last name? If 1st, are they close enough to call other by their 1st name? If last name, ok then. Sorry about complaint, just wanna point that out.

Please pick name pattern to use and make it consistent. Last hapter you use Sousuke Aizen (1st Name before last) but now you use Aizen Sousuke (Last name before 1st)

1st because you need to change entire narrative and the world law to fit it in. In HP world, Immortal is suppose to be something almost impossible to achieve and very limit even if you get it. However, in this new narrative, it was much more common since MC already have it somehow. If it easy and achievable with multiple way to attain, then everyone would already have it and there is no threat that can really be kill since everyone just can get immortality. 2nd, with new race, author need to add oc character to fit it into the story or change the race of existing character. Both are not appealing to many readers. You can change the story while still respect to the original law/lore without breaking it apart with unnecessary element. But just like you like the originally of this story, I just dislike that unnesesasy element of it. It's just different in opinion, that's all.

I disagree with you on no character development IRL. People can change, but not only himself, those around him should allow the person to grow as person too. I saw those who were bully as a teenager become respect member of society. I saw Homophobic person who try and finally overcome his prejudice. I saw a drug addict gave up on it and work honest life. Just because you didn't see it, doesn't meant it's not out there. People nowadays quickly judge people, and not only won't forgive and give a chance to someone, Internet warrior will bully them to the hell and even cause a few suici*e case.

Put harem tag please. Not everyone like it.

I don't feel like this is binding vow at all, more like skill AOE. where the further they were it just weaker. A binding vow would be the closer his opponent are, the powerful their aura become but in exchange, their sense reverse more heavily. It something that should add more risk to the users, but what you state, while also a risk, but any melee combat also hold the same risk as any so I don't think this is a good vow. BTW can I use your idea for my story, I always want to make transmigration into Amori, but that where similarity end. My beginning already were different from your story.

As in Aura... Nen is too broad to use here.