Jmitch1

Lol

I’m enjoying your book very much. The only issue I can forsee, is the lack of a goal for the MC. He’s always seemed lost. And even though he desires adventure, there hasn’t been enough worldbuilding to explain or give hints as to where he’ll go for adventure or what in particular he wants to do. Another thing. You switch to present tense at times. It’s a complete throw off, and I hate reading in present tense personally for books. But the switching drives me out the story. It could be for others as well. Also, you left a suggestion, but I find it odd that a couple could get married and not consummate it. Meaning the girl the MC is in love with would have likely been taken by a man he hates. An interesting premise, but I think it’s a relationship that should be considered dead. Shes married, her husband is still alive… and the family will not be on his side (outside of the sister). It’s a messy affair. Watching him go through grief is one thing, but I hope it’s not something continually pursued. I hope he finds someone new. Anyways, overall, it’s a great story so far. I’m having fun, which is the most important. Keep up the good work!

Oof. I’m not a fan of frame-ups. I know it’s valid strategically, but it really raises my blood pressure. That stuff…no going back from it. Even if you’re “cleared”

Damn. Durak needs a knife in his neck

What little meat was mixed In their food?

Lol

…bruh

Damn. Right in your face

If you knew he was ruthless to family, why bother him? Clearly , you didn’t know.