MotivatedSloth

No

Short-sleeved kimono of sorts. Saw it once in a certain... cultured manga, been a fan ever since :D

It will

In a world of business, if you don't have the brand behind yourself and enter as a newbie, you will never get the deal on the same level as someone that comes with company, patents, proofs of concepts and all the likes. What MC sells here is basically the idea, putting all the costs of putting into use, crafting more of it, marketing, protecting the IP, and the weight of risk if its a scam or comes with unpredicted downsides. It is a good offer for someone entering the partnership. The standards of established business that have a lot to lose are different.

There might be some later on, but its deffo not the focus of the story. Knowing me, however, it might come into play later on, but not as just something for me to get "romance" tag/card for the novel, but integral part of the plot that I'm setting up

Next time put more effort into creating a throwaway account. Also, I only need a fraction of the time you use to post those to remove them <3

Tbh, the best angle I've found about this whole debacle is one that entirely strips it out of mysticizm and fanboyism. European swords and armor were better not only because they used higher-quality steel and thus had better performance (there are records of Hussar armor that saved its owners from A CANNON FCKING SHOT) but majorly because with the advancement of smithing technology, for every katana/samurai armor created on Japan, europeans could construct a few dozen of their swords and armors. Ultimately, it is not about creating the perfect weapon. It is about driving the cost and time necessary to make one as far down as possible, while maintaining the quality as to effectively field more men. Who cares if you have the best katana in the world, if creating it took as much manpower/resources/money/time as someone else dedicated to field a hundred knights against you?

>.> Shots fired!

Hey man, let me adress the points you raised one by one: - Boring, meaningless, unecessary monologues - The story starts with MC that neither you nor any other readers know, an mc that effectively ends up stranded all on his own in a hostile world. The inner dialogue or his self-directed speech is not only the story-wise element of him keeping his sanity (cue, willson the ball from that old movie about a man stranded on an island) but it also comes from the angle of the character's... characterization. It's through his thoughts, self-dialogue and actions that readers can get insight to what kind of a person he is, how he thinks and all. "My friend" - Please, keep that low-key condescending tone to yourself. It would be a different situation in a different review, but the overall tone of what you write made it quite passive-aggresive, and I'm simply too busy writing to adress it any further than just pointing it out - tl:dr, be nice. Poem or a story - I'm sorry, dear reader, but this novel is already heavily dumbed down, be it in terms of plot, progression, vocabulary, sentence structure or paragraph structure. If you still think it's too much, then you might've grown a bit too used to the MTL side of webnovel. Additionally, every author creates their own workshop - a set of terms, words and flourish that makes their writing... well, theirs. I'm not going to cut what little of my own workshop I've left, especially when my chapters are written with 7th grade level of english. Maybe I can, but I outright refuse to go any lower than that, for it would strip all the flavor from the novel. "Past life nonsense" - from the history of your activity I can see you are an avid fanfic reader. And while that's perfectly fine in its own right, please, do not transplant fanfic standards to an original novel. I don't have the convinience of having an entire, established universe to draw from while assuming all the readers to be already familiar with. The backstory, past life and the likes are there for a reason, because they are important enough for me to include them, because they allow readers to better understand and hopefully sympathize with the character, or simply for the reason of justifying where his thoughts or knowledge come from. This is a part of the storytelling that most fanfics are stripped from, but a part that's integral to originals. I understand if its not to your taste, but please, do not judge an original novel through the extremely limiting lens of a fanfic - for there is a reason I've never stopped to writing one, regardless of how much of an easy popularity shot as they might be. "Spoiling the fun of those who want to forget reality" - I disagree here again. By rooting the character in the modern world, I can better juxtapose him in this weird, unfamiliar world. "Unnecessary details" - I'm sorry, dear reader, but this is not for you to judge. "unnecessary whining" - That could be for you to judge, but it seems you've forgotten Theo was literally executed by exile and is expected to die a gruesome death to powerful monsters during his exile term. I understand if you like to read about characters that doesn't care about such things and are able to magically adopt to a foreign, extremely dangerous world and exceel in them while maintaining a harem of two thousand jade beauties with huge bossoms and insatiable lust for Mc's sausage that comes at the cost of their entire personality... But that's simply not this kind of a story. Tl:DR - While you have every right to have your opinion of this novel, I do firmly believe the standards you seem to be used to (judging by how your activity on webnovel is entirely filled with nothing but fanfics) simply do not apply to this novel in particular or to most of original novels as a whole, as such, making your judgement quite unfair. But hey, just like I saw it happen in the past many times over, since you claim the subject is good and my way of writing harms the story (that I've barely managed to start) I honestly and wholeheartedly invite you to write your own take on it. PS: Reposted cuz wn cut the ending >.>

All in its due time <3