Unmatched

So far apart from setting a predetermined plot, the system has no use, if the reward for the other options were good, the story would have more interesting premise but only having one reward that seems enticing just makes the concept of multiple options redundant.

Just some tips, totally down to you but do a lot more showing and a lot less explaining

But it said Madara opened his as a child in the original 🥲

Please remember the characters you’re writing are 11 year olds 😅

Someone else is already translating this fic and is much further than you

So the MC is a puppy that just gets lead along by Dumbledoor (however you spell his name)… got it

You need to fix the changes in perspective the ‘he’ to ‘I’

Aah I know what's happening, should I spoil it?

And so the dreaded curse strikes again. A name that doesn’t fit the setting

Idk what happened but as soon as it hit ch 100 it became Wuxiafied 🥲 I was so confused… ‘mad demon jariah’, random names started popping up, the dialogue felt like it was transforming into a wuxia novel. I’m just waiting for him to start cultivating atp