Hawkgan
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For fight scenes I recommend using words like flank, parry, etc since it gives a clear mental image for those tasks. I think you have done a pretty good job of giving the reader special awareness. Another tip you could possibly do is during fights occasionally have a super short sentence for a task that happens way faster than other things in the fight. For instance you could have “Bang. Ben turned around to see Keira’s shirt slowly dye red”
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When she’s actually under a month old…
“Nothing major” = broke all her bones in all locations on that arm
Infront-> in front Just minor typos
They’re -> their
Excellent, the bandages are back
Oof
When you work for free out of curiosity
Gotta nab those deals
Superhero landing
Significant time = 2 days And thats bound to only get faster as he gets stronger
Gonna have to wait until the next evolution i suppose.