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usually i have to complain about pacing being far too slow, but this author really needs to learn how to slow down. three different crises in 11 chapters is by far the most overly quick pacing I have ever seen. Author, I really hope you learn to spread your story out a bit. I don't want to read a story that is changing what the current arc is supposed to be about every other chapter.
ah yes. the fakest Hollywood sword style to ever exist. no true sword style reverses the main blade.
you do not know what the word "inconsequential" means. stop using it.
I think you are misremembering. Abby had a full set of Black Grade techniques that she eventually changed all of them to silver. As it has, multiple times, been explained that changing techniques is mildly detrimental the more you do it, it was explained that Abby learned a Golden Defensive Technique upon changing stages. This is also when the author made tiny reference in a paragraph or two to the fact that most of Minos combat related techniques require a "clean slate" at stage change to be learned and that he only has few techniques at the Golden Stage that can be changed to, most of which aren't combat related.
It was explained earlier that most of Minos Golden Grade techniques had to be learned as a primary and could not be switched to as Abby would need to do so I think she only has her shielding technique at the Golden Grade.
negotiators aren't messengers.
or write it into the story. Stop using the authors notes to explain what you should be explaining in the narrative. Never use foot notes or asides to explain core information. I'm seriously questioning your understanding of creative writing. Maybe take some classes to better understand why some of your decisions are completely wrong. No editor would ever accept this.
Yes! No matter the circumstances all Rapists are trash. would have been an instantaneous drop from me if you made the MC a rapist.
tactically stupid. how will you hear any alerts from the guard now?
nah. more like "most male authors can't write believable female characters because they've never spoken with one". Seriously, in what manner did the Haory/Hoary ever indicate she thought Max was a bad guy in their previous fight? This feels utterly shoehorned in for absolutely no believable reason.
advice: never reveal story information in side notes. This type of information should always be revealed in the narrative. Any other way is a failure on the part of the author.
pretty sure he just literally "raised" his father's death flag on this 3-star hunt. I'm guessing an undisclosed nobles betrayal. one that wanted Max's mother and is thinking "she'd still be alive if she chose me...."
while somewhat humorous, unless this is being written by a 12 year old the word "Undies" should never be written by a serious author.
Harems in primitive and ancient societies aren't typically formed just because of strength. The reason there aren't many instances of Female centric polygamy is because a woman can only get pregnant once at a time, whereas men can get multiple women pregnant at the same time, greatly increasing population and therefore usable resources for expansion.
Because Spirit Cultivation is popular. So far this feels like SC stripped down temu edition.
"shoot it"?
how? you're telling me that Artoria Pendragon was not ever the leader of Avalon? This makes no sense.
sorted -> sordid
thats a scene from the Norse God of War game.
polyamory is legitimately possible. Vahn level polyamory is only possible with time-shenanigans and immortality.