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Fateshaper_Riifty2 years ago
Balas vicious_sheep
good catch :D
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The Book of Devils
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Fateshaper_Riifty2 years ago
Balas MoreMercury76
I see! Well, the protagonist needs some opposition! 😁
In fact, Samuel was completely flabbergasted at the level of caution that Rick showed. Hiring a third level bodyguard against the revenge of a Manaless? Unthinkable for most people. It was clear that Rick's background was more important than expected.
The Book of Devils
perkotaan · Fateshaper_Riifty
Fateshaper_Riifty2 years ago
Balas MoreMercury76
You wanna elaborate? what is a chain villain and why are you done with the novel simply because of that? Just curious
In fact, Samuel was completely flabbergasted at the level of caution that Rick showed. Hiring a third level bodyguard against the revenge of a Manaless? Unthinkable for most people. It was clear that Rick's background was more important than expected.
The Book of Devils
perkotaan · Fateshaper_Riifty
Fateshaper_Riifty2 years ago
Balas MoreMercury76
He's right-handed but his right arm is gone so he's using his left hand to eat which is why it's unsteady :D
"Thank you very much. I'm indebted to you." Samuel scooted over to the coffee table and picked up the spoon. He was right-handed so his movements were unsteady but he managed to eat.
The Book of Devils
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Fateshaper_Riifty2 years ago
Balas Samoyeet
ahahaha in my fantasy earth the brain can feel pain
The floating letters continued to fill his vision. Samuel reached out and touched the button that said "Yes." As soon as he did, a beam of light shot out from the button and it hit him in the forehead. He felt a searing pain in his brain. Enduring the pain took all his mental willpower but he didn't know what would happen if he blacked out while in this state of limbo.
The Book of Devils
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Fateshaper_Riifty2 years ago
Balas Excelsior_x
Thanks for the review! Seems like I definitely need to work on my long paragraphs! Glad you like the story so far though!
The Book of Devils
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Fateshaper_Riifty2 years ago
Balas Stormzz
Thanks for the honest review! I'll be working on breaking up my paragraphs more. And, yes it is a generic writing genre but it will get better!
The Book of Devils
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Fateshaper_Riifty2 years ago
Diterbitkan
Great writing quality, but there are some spelling and grammar mistakes. The two characters, Nolamine and Son-join are fantastic. Loving the dynamic between them. The world-building is somewhat confusing, but I’ve only read about 6 chapters so I’m sure it will make sense. The pacing is a bit slow, which isn’t a bad thing but I prefer faster-paced novels to read.
Martyr The Devourer Of Wands
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Fateshaper_Riifty2 years ago
Berkomentar
Love this guy
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Martyr The Devourer Of Wands
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Fateshaper_Riifty2 years ago
Berkomentar
Pretty interesting but I’m having trouble figuring out who the main character is hahaha
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Martyr The Devourer Of Wands
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The Book of Devils