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the translation itself is good, but too bad the story itself is boring, the story Pace is too fast, the interaction between each chara is too little to make us the reader know what relationship they have (is it friend, stranger or what) because of that it's weird that suddenly the chara are friendly with each other, it's also the case with his relationship with Jennifer Aniston, they only met a few Times yet suddenly they had sex and in a relationship? Wow, is it only me or that's a really weird thing? And also because of the story Pace, for me the MC is only a shallow character, i can't feel his motivation, his dream, his regret, hell i don't even know his past, where he's come from before. Overall I don't think it's really a bad story, it just need some change for me to read it.

This is the best mushoku tensei fanfic i ever read, the character emotion is so well developed, the story pace is also great, although it's mostly following the original storyline, it doesn't make the story boring at all, the change the author make still within logical reason and it's actually make it interesting. I just hope that this story can continue till the end, all i can say, good luck to the author and keep make the story

For those whose interested this is the link to the original book in Chinese: https://www.69shu.cx/book/39788.htm

This is a fanfiction about Gundam Seed, this fanfiction is a translation of a Chinese work, If you want the link, i will share it in this comment. I translate this work mostly so I can read this fanfic without thinking in my head the correct gender and searching the correct character name when I read it, although it's not really a perfect translation, well i tried my best, at least in my opinion it's still readable lol.

It's a passable story, It's rare to have a fanfic about an ongoing manhwa. IMO the story progress to fast, there's no meaningful conversation between each Chara that makes it hard for me to be immersed in the story, It's too shallow, you used too many narrative, the system function still too ambigous, there's no mention if he can increase his stats by working on it or it can only be increase using pretend point. I read the story till 14 chap but the only character i can see in the MC is not a really good one, he didn't have a motivation except increasing his stats, no meaningful bonds between other chara because he always pretending, no dream, he accept his situation too fast. So far this story is readable but for me this story didn't make me want to wait each update to read it, if this is not a fanfic about mercenary enrollment then this Will became a boring story. I don't know if it became better later on but i am not really interested on reading on.

really? then where can i read the original fanfic?

One of the best HP fanfic i ever read, what i like the most in this fanfic is that it explain more about the fundamental of magic, the chara dialog is done well by the author, i just wished that he can confront his feeling about his father as soon as posible.

First of all for context i read this fanfic till before the end of the first volume, the thing i really noticed is that you use timeskip too much that we didn't really get a feel about the chara feeling, emotion, relationship, etc so it didn't really make the story feel immersive enough, when MC parent died, i didn't really feel anything except okay... so he became an oprhan then when the truth about his teacher and friend come out i also didn't really care too much about it, even till a whole town and his friend died it didn't really make me feel anything. This is just my opinion but i think you should spent some time to make chapters about their relationship, you rushed too much with the timeskip, i won't ask about every single day in his life but at least make enough to make reader care enough about the chara especially if its OC since we didn't know their emotion enough to speculate, even with og chara in arc about training with true dragon you timeskipped it, especially the romance part with the true dragon, you rushed too much with the story.

the wukong in this story has gone through the journey to the west storyline, but what is written instead is wukong who are arrogant, has no self reastrained, eager to kill someone, so easy to anger and also an idiot, i know that in this story wukong didn't complete his journey and those close to him died but to regressed his character even make him worse is too much in my opinion. He obviously didn't have his original strength yet he provoked someone stronger than him, other than prof x, jean and other kid who bullied him, the other chara didn't really do anythinh wrong, yet he hated them all the same. The story also advance too fast there's no detailed explanation about anything, the chara feel too 2 dimensional. I am really happy when someone make a fanfic using wukong or his strength as the base and not goku, yet this story dissapointed me to much.

It's a good fanfic, in the first place there's hardly a fic about TSE so i appreciate the author work on this, the thing that i can critics about this fic is that the weird interaction between each character for example early on it stated that rokuro hated the MC but later on they talked with each other casually, although it is stated that rokuro knew that it's not the MC fault, i want to see their conflict about that i think, also i don't know if it will be mention at later chapter but his guilt about their friends dead didn't really affect him much.