Reincarnated in demon Slayer as my first world (rewriting)

I'm here because of shinobu and kanae (don't let kanae die please dear author) protect herI'm here because of shinobu and kanae (don't let kanae die please dear author) protect her

I'm here because of shinobu and kanae (don't let kanae die please dear author) protect her

This is the first novel im rating 1 star.... it's truly garbage, straight up trash. Its true that I've only read to chapter 3, but its just unreadable. I'm saying this ff is a complete failure. Not just the grammar but the story too. I like demon slayer fanfics, but this one is just not it. I'm leaving my review here, if the ff gets better i'll delete my review.

hello every one I would like it if you guys donate me some power stone and I cant do many chapter in Sunday cause I always do my module at Sunday cause I am a lazy person so I rush doing it to pass it to school this day I need to do 4 week worth of my module cause it's overdue already

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for a while i could not put my finger on why i dislike this fic so badly, know i realize its because the characterization,writing,background details,dialogue is all trash. none of the harem feels like the actual cast and any attempts at writing them usually has heavy flanderization. how do they so easily fall in love with the mc?. the dialogue itself is even worse as none of the words said feel natural and are 100% forced. the background details are so sparse that i usually have to refer to my own knowledge of the locations or simply guess. this story is the embodiment why i hate harems.

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I got to the wishes then I thought 'Oh the first few wishes were decent' Author be like "This isn't even my final form!" And just like that, a dagger cut me deeply as this turned into a wattpad novel where the mc has supersaiyan 999 chrono ssjgssj 5 levels of op. He has unlimited points with a system that could give him anything. So basically he doesn't need more than 2 wishs because he has legit everything he could want with the shop. Rant over Writing quality 2/5 Grammar and story Stability 5/5 (I gave up on this) Story development (1/5) Unlimited power!!! Character design (2/5) CEO complex type World background (2/5) Just cause of the way the guy died.

First, there are many grammatical errors. I suggest you use Grammarly. It's not perfect, but I think it is enough to fix the majority of the grammatical errors. The interactions between the two (Akira and Shinobu) are lacking. I'm not good at writing reviews, so pardon me. I might edit this review.

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a few chapters in and im done. this fic is so trash its actually not funny ⁰00⁰0000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000

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Поставлю 5 звезд за твое отношение ко всему! Хехех. В тебе есть авторско-божественная основа! . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

i think the plot is very good but there is one point i find a bit not so good is the infinite point of the MC, i think it reduces the dramatic part of the story.

good story, harem which i like, hope you include nezuko as well, hope you write and post more chapters, if you switch to 'pay on PAtreon' I will find you

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