I must admit, I had serious doubts about continuing to read this book after the first three or so chapters. However, my stubbornness prevailed, and I refused to believe that an author could persistently employ such abysmal grammar throughout thirteen chapters and counting.
Despite my initial reservations, I am relieved that I pressed on. I only wish that the first few chapters were as smoothly written as the subsequent ones. It is evident that little to no proofreading or editing was conducted for the early portions of the book, which is a real shame considering the intriguing nature of the story. I must applaud the author for crafting incredible dialogue, though - even in the initial chapters (I struggle with this in my writing).
To ensure a more engaging experience for readers, I suggest addressing the following issues that hindered my enjoyment:
1. Grammar: The presence of errors, such as substituting "please" for "plead," "late" for "let," or even incorporating unusual terms like "eternality," can be easily rectified with simple text editing tools like Google Docs or Word. There is no excuse for neglecting this aspect of the writing.
2. Tense consistency: The narration frequently switches between present tense (unfolding events) and past tense, which can be confusing for readers. While not as detrimental as the grammatical errors, it still detracts from the overall reading experience.
3. Descriptive context: Providing more description and context surrounding the dialogue would greatly enhance readers' understanding of the unfolding events, the reactions of the characters, and the ambiance of the settings.
In summary:
1. The first few chapters suffer from poor grammar, but the quality improves as the book progresses.
2. The plot is captivating and easy to follow.
3. I appreciate the author's use of the first-person perspective, which switches between different characters.
4. The concept of "linksoul" is intriguing and well-executed.
5. I eagerly anticipate future chapters and will keep a watchful eye out for them.
By addressing the issues mentioned above, the book has the potential to provide an even more enjoyable reading experience for its audience.
