Writing Quality:
There are a few grammatical errors in the story that can be easily overlooked by other readers— however, I will not overlook it. I want this book to be at a quality it deserves: the best. I think an editor or beta reader would vastly improve the quality of this book which can lure in a bigger reader base. The way characters speak and think, can sometimes be stiff— this can be easily fixed. I pointed this out because the formal words, accompanied with the occasional informal words, can make for a jarring reading. Think of a painter who created a realistic painting of a mountain with a cartoon character inserted in the middle of it. It doesn’t fit. I hope that, in the future, these minor things can be fixed to provide a better reading experience for readers. The biggest gripe I have when it concerns the writing, is when something is told to me and not shown. There are so much details that haven’t been described explicitly, which I personally think is a shame. There were so many missed opportunities that could have been taken advantaged of in order to really get a reader into the thick of the plot. Of course, this is only a personal opinion and, in the end, it doesn’t affect my rating of the writing quality that much.
Don’t let the writing quality stop you from reading this, however. It’s a treasure that’s yet to be dusted.
Update Stability:
I know that the author updates once a day, which I applaud them for. I’m well aware that this is not an easy feat unless you have a lot of ideas -that the Author has proven that they have-, inspiration and determination -a trait that, again, the Author has-. Kudos. I noticed someone mention that the chapters are updated at random time because there are no stockpile chapters. Allow me to applaud the Author again; having no stockpile chapters, yet still they update -or try to make up for missed updates the following day- daily? This alone tells me that the Author is dead serious about this novel -as they should be- and is dedicated to providing the readers a steady flow of updates. I recommend having a stock pile of chapters so you may not have to worry in writing up a chapter last minute.
World Building:
Though the plot is albeit fast paced, there is a steady amount of world building in the story. We follow various characters in the book, which allows the reader to widen the view of this book’s world with every chapter. Even though we’ve been thrown head first into a world with quite a bit of information overload (courtesy of chapter 0), we’re steadily introduced to things that we eventually become adjusted to. For this, I think the world building is quite well-done, even if I hoped that parts of the world would be further explored (for example, the dungeons; they are fascinating).
Story Development:
The story is unique as it has five main characters. Readers are able to see what the main characters are doing; with them, we face their struggles, their pains and their victories. As others have pointed out -as will I-, the premise of having five main characters is a big deal. It would be near-impossible for readers to keep track of each journey that each main character is on. It would be interesting to see how the Author showcases the individual adventures of each main character until their hopeful reunions. I believe that it would be a difficult journey for the Author to balance the spotlight for each main character as well as making the characters themselves memorable enough for a reader to not forget who is who, why so and so is doing what they are doing. I think that, with the right amount of attention, character building and so on that is given to each character of the story, the Author can create a master piece in this book. Having five main characters will either be the weakness of this book or -I am of the opinion- it will be carrying this book into a successful end.
Summary:
I heavily recommend this to readers who crave action and drama. There are aspects of found family, but from what I’ve read so far, there is no romance, which I find to be a relief.
My favourite character so far has to be Satoshi -for no particular reason of course-. Aha, jokes aside, this really is a well-written book that can, with a bit of polishing, become quite popular. I cannot wait to read on as this story continues to develop.
I look forward to see what the Author has to offer and what this book will become.
