Highschool DxD : The Time Devil

hello everyone, Author here, please do read the story..😁😁

i will give 4.4 stars for new fanfiction....from first chapter i read i am ready like the story but don't know your update schedule....and thanks for consider my comment at chapter 1

Only one chapter so far wasn’t any glaring grammatical errors story has alot of potential just needs to add regular updates and it’ll get a decent audience you should also get a synopsis for this story

I like his power and that he is a scientist but can you show how he slowly grows up his old personality starts to awaken and fight the new one cause I think he definitely did bad things in his old life with how you describe his personality but I think you need to add the scientist in his character more cause right now you are kinda repeating your self but saying how he needs to develop control of his power training and how he has coversation with other just seems void with no emotions including interaction but I see the potential in this and I know this novel is just beginning so keep going it looks good right now it just needs to be more iron out so maybe by putting more interaction with the characters this is my opion so don’t take it to heart or anything it is your story keep going

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